As I Die
by Loveless Dreamer Oct 11, 2009
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As I sit in silence & surrounded by hate. |
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16 years ago
Exactly wat i intended
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16 years ago
Kool! thanks amelia. thats great that you can relate to it.
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16 years ago
Wow. this was very very good. i liked it alot. its one of those poems i can relate to because ive been in that situation before and i know what its like.
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16 years ago
Oh ok thx ben
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16 years ago
by Kuro
You must be feeling pretty low to write all these depressing poems all at once. i hope you feel better,but that doesn't mean much coming from me.
about the poem: "With death in, I slite my wrist...now say goodnight."
^ that seems like an awkward line. the first 3 words do not make sense, also "slite" is misspelled. its supposed to be "SLIT". also elipsies are not really nessecary. if you want to make a dramatic pause, either use a comma or go to the next line. that way when the reader reads it, the pause is more effective. but thats my opinion
