I Finally Found You!

by Cale   Oct 23, 2009


I have to be dreaming.
This cant be real.
Your the most amazing girl in the world.
And words cannot describe how i feel.

How beautiful you are overwhelms me.
And your voice gives me chills.
It is sweet music to my ears.
And hearing your laugh gives me a thrill.

I know I have not known you long.
But this feels so right.
I feel as though I have known you my whole life.
And thoughts of you keep me awake at night.

Everything is going perfect.
I hope it never has to end.
Everyday I fall for you even more.
And i cant wait to make you my girlfriend.

I have never felt like this.
When i talk to you I cant help but smile.
I am the happiest guy in the world.
And i hope these feelings stay for a while.

I have spent time on others.
But they all broke my heart.
But i know you are different.
And i hate to see us apart.

I know that you have been hurt too.
Boys have come and left you with tears.
Now you are slow to trust.
But don't worry, with me you have nothing to fear.

All I think about is how I want you in my arms.
To just hold you and never let go of you.
I would kiss your sweet lips.
And i would show you that these feelings are true.

But i hope our feelings grow.
And that we end up together.
We will never be hurt again.
But have something to last forever.

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  • 14 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    My first suggestion would be not to have a period after every single line, the abrupt stop is not needed, you can place the period at the end of the stanza but not after each and every line.

    "cant" should be "can't".

    Capitalize your "i"s.

    "Your" should be "You're".

    Now to the poem itself, I would say 4/5 from me. I could tell your words were straight from the heart and I admire that but in some places the wording was a bit brief/ awkward.

    It got better as I read on but I wanted to know in full detail, not just the basics. What is her voice like? What are her eyes like? Do you believe that this love is perpetual? Are you unified? I just think it could have been much more elaborated and I just didn't get into this as I thought I would.

    I did read some good parts though and you do have much talent, but I would just take the time to review and go over this piece. Just my opinion though.

    God bless you and Merry Christmas!

    ~MaryAnne

  • 14 years ago

    by Kalee

    This is a really lovely poem. the flow and rhyming were done wonderfully. and the emotion up put into it was clear to see. 5/5

    Kalee

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