Wooow !! am really touched by ur poem sweety .. its more like a story .. and its very well written .. i luv ur style in writtin .. i simply luuuuuuuuuuuuuuuv it .. i wish i waz so gd like u are (k)

Its really good, if you want to spiff it up look for synonyms for certain "low level" words like made. 5/5.

Thank you.

I thought my poems were starting to lose feeling after a while.

I really love the overall concept of the poem. The only thing I could find that would make it better is the rhythm. You don't necessarily have to rhyme to have rhythm. Just make it flow. Re-read your poem out loud to yourself. I'm sure you can find a way to improve it, but like I said before, I like the concept of the poem. There's nothing wrong with the feelings or the story line. So good job with that, Krissyy. :]

Keep writing.
-Cayce;;

This is a awesome poem i love it and i love the way you write!!!!!!