Better Known As My Heart

This place so perfect and wholesome and true,
This is the place where Love could take you.
Please grasp my hand and we'll get a head start,
This is the land better known as my heart.

...how often are you goingto amaze me? Thats a sincere question. This was AMAZING. Ive never written anything like this, i dont think. The last stanza was sooo powerful and true that it made me get teary eyed. 5/5

This place so perfect and wholesome and true,
This is the place where Love could take you.
Please grasp my hand and we'll get a head start,
This is the land better known as my heart.

...how often are you goingto amaze me? Thats a sincere question. This was AMAZING. Ive never written anything like this, i dont think. The last stanza was sooo powerful and true that it made me get teary eyed. 5/5

Purple shadows grasp cold wristsÂ
Silent whispers and bloodied fists,
Broken heart of twenty lies,
A new love born as an old love dies

There is a “” symbol in the first line. you did a good job of describing desperation, violence, anger, gossip, and new and broken love.

Seeking air while six fee under
Angry voices roll thick as thunder
Haunters, stalkers, users, thieves
Much more worry than wringing hands need.

You are missing a “T” in “six feet under” and there is another “” symbol in the last line
this stanza is quite morbid and criptic, but it sets up the perfect aurora.

Poor Little baby, so blind to great life
All of Gods beauty turned wrong in his eyes
Trust not a soul and not a soul will trust you.
Spread lies and rumors, that's all he must do.

You should an A in the first line so it reads “blind to A great life”
in this stanza you show how his/her mind is changing.

Thrive on pain and drink the blood.
Tastes like metal and acidic rust.
tiny shards that chipped of a heart.
God could help but he's not up to par.

Every line is capitalized in the beginning except line 3. And you should add an F so it reads chipped OFF a heart
now we know what he changed his mind to, and we can see how it disturbs and how there is conflict. it also reminds me of a Vampire

Unfortunate so, the deed as been done.
This battle was lost, the war has been won.
Both sides opposing this mythical love.
Too many times murdered for what they dreamed of.

At first I thought that you should add an LY to unfortunate making it unfortunately, but reading it again, I’m not so sure.
it is starting to calm down now.

A little hope for a much better life.
Away from the noises and media lies.
A place so sacred, the name is but lost.
A place so silent that thoughts must be hushed.

and now you reflect on what has happened and how it makes you feel. feels like an ending but it lacks a vibrant clincher

This place so perfect and wholesome and true,
This is the place where Love could take you.
Please grasp my hand and we'll get a head start,
This is the land better know as my heart.

Add an N so it reads known as my heart.
and there it is, the clincher. revealing the secret to your title and making sense of it all.

nicely done, keep up the good work
~Ben