Comments : Mid-Winters Night

  • 13 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    As I read this, it gave a picture of a warm relationship that stands strong during the coldest of a winter..hope that makes sense. Very nicely penned. Thank you also for the comment..take care.

  • 13 years ago

    by Jenn

    This is so amazing...
    I could feel what you were writting, I could see it. Change ur profile because I do think you write with the best of them :)

  • 13 years ago

    by Tom Swart

    I love this piece of yours which so nicely gives me winter and makes me long for the cold that will soon be here - blankets like old friends stand ready to bring their warmth comfort and keep my soul toasty. thanks for a wonderful moment of winter during the end of this summer

  • 11 years ago

    by yogi73

    I love the imagery. I can imagine a cold MT night with the moon in the sky. Despite the cold subject of the poem, i sense the warm love of the person that shares this winter night walk.

    There were some mechanial problems for me with this poem...
    outshining full winter's moon - should be possessive form, as you are talking about winter's moon.

    The periods at the end of the some of the sentences distracted from the flow and what I thought should have been connected thoughts...

    To the deepest in the heart
    whom have the souls of you and me.

    In the second stanza, I would remove all the periods and remove the word Also, from second sentence...makes it needlessly wordy.

    Sorry to pick it apart, but it was a beautiful poem, and I love your poetic voice...keep writing