Beautifully written Nik..XD Nice wordings too...Although i would have to say, it could have been ended much better...Just my opinion though..:-)

I love this. once again you worded this perfectly. the detailed description was so effective in creating amazing imagery. i actually think the ending is really good, it shows the utter pain that this person is going through. you are so talented. i love reading your poetry. 5/5

Nik, This starts out very well but this ending is not up to your usual standards. Not sure what the other ending was but this one just doesn't seem put together.

Hmm. I would have to say that out of all of your writes, this one was the most creative. I loved the ending. It sort of made my mind go to other places. Not sure how it ended before you edited it, but it is perfect. I must say that you are quite talented and gifted when it comes to placing WORDS in the right places. Great job with the format as well.
5/5

Kay Jay

This one. :]