I like how most of this didn't really tie up the story, but it seemed like the last bit did. overall i like it a lot, but i'm curious as to why you decided to put into a 3-part poem

When I read something original it always give me a thrill so when I started on your trilogy of Alison I found it was like a fascinating blossoming love story, in the beginning, the dawning and the after glow.
You as a poet are new to me and in the first part I ate up your words, chocolate like hair, Rappling through mazes of dark light so imaginative, and so image building as all excellent poetry, and refreshing in its newness.
The last two lines were my favourite and so right to end it. I wonder were your finale came from, You'll be my valentine tonight intriguing.
My favourite of the three parts was the second part amazing and descriptive full of insight and the wonder of love in its full glory with you besotted by your subject. I truly enjoyed it from start to finish and wonder if it was easy as love helps when your mind opens to it.
Your final verse, the wonder comes out of what you have and perhaps a fear of loosing? words like Eclaircise my anxiety & illuminate my growth, love can do strange things to you, its last line the seal and so appropriate.
One of the best poetry strings I have read in a long time and worth an excellent 5/5 for every part of it. You have won me over and I can't wait to read the rest of your work. Thanks Ray S

I love the way you made this love story threeparts! beautiful just like the others! :)

Once again well written! a great end to the trilogy! Everything was impeccable again. Very nice

Once again, wonderful job. The words (as well as the meaning behind them) are simply beautiful. I can't pick out my favorite lines, because they're all too good to choose between. 5/5 Keep up the fantastic work!

I believe that the Final was the best of the three. You are a very talented writer. You have the gift of placing words in the correct places, in the correct manner, to create a work of art/poetry that makes me feel as if I myself am the writer. Great job with the imagery in all three parts. Keep writing fellow poet. Amazing reads. 5/5

-Kay Jay

A most excellent climax to a masterpiece

The poems are all short all 3 of them but their so descriptive and filled with passion and flow its hard not to give them 5/5 Its crazy how love sometimes makes us a fool for one person who becomes irresistible for life. Great work once again

The last stanza was my favorite. This was such a good poem that I'm not even sure how to comment it. I just hope you keep writing because this was amazing :) I loved all three. Nik

"Eclaircise my anxiety & illuminate my growth,
You'll be my epiphany Tonight." These lines really stood out. Anyone in love would really like this because it's so appealing.

"Alison & spring shall blush a witty beat,
Lips, a divine teaser for physical intent,
I am the misty dawn at your feet,
Swirling sensations shall regard transparent,
Opus 5 will reveal this compelling identity,
Naughty, voluptuous, smothered with serenity,"

Lovly words written down, my favorite line had to be the third, it was beautiful. I would suggest at the last line, to place a period instead of your comma.

"Circle the aperture of a discovered faith,
Amplify my trust, a tender oath,
Ripple thou innocence of charming delight,
Eclaircise my anxiety & illuminate my growth,
You'll be my epiphany Tonight."

I believe that your love is uniting even more so with Alison in this piece, every heartbeat is being woven together, which fits perfectly if this is the finale. The only tiny thing that bothered me was how "Tonight" was capitalized, as I feel it has no need to, though you may capitalize "epiphany" for extra emphasis. Just my view though.

Thank you for the three reads, you will get very far, and never give up hope that you cannot do something, because you can.

~MA

The series of Alison poems are absolutely beautiful. i wish I had half the writing chops you have, my friend. :)

keep writing.

:)

Not all poems need a twist, I dont think this one needs it, its perfect the way it is. Theres really nothing else I can say, your poems are excellently written with great imagery and very powerful. Your very talented, cant wait to read more!

Cool string. I like reading acrostic poems, i have one on here, and the fact that you used the same acronym for all yet changed the lines as in a progressing story is something seldom seen. Great Job!