Near or Far

Thank you. I appreciate constructive criticism. I'll read some of your poetry.

Every time I see you my emotions begin to soar.
Every time I kiss you makes me want you even more.
Every time I'm in your arms everything feels just right.
Every morning is better when I fall asleep in your arms at night.

'Every time I see you, my emotions begin to soar.
Every time we kiss, it makes me want you even more.
Every time I'm in your arms, everything feels just right.
Every morning is better when I fall asleep in your arms each night.'
^^I didn't suggest any word changes, just added some commas. I believe that the flow is better with the added commas. But it is just a suggestion.

Leaving you is possibly going to be the hardest thing to do.
This Christmas was amazing simply because I had you.
I have never had someone as amazing as you by my side.
Nor have I ever had to leave someone special so far behind.

'Leaving you will be the hardest thing to do.
This Christmas was amazing, simply because I had you.
I have never had someone as amazing as you by my side.
Nor have I had to leave someone so special far behind.'
^^I deleted some words from this stanza simply because they weren't really needed.

Leaving you is not what I want to do,but unfortunately sometimes we have no choice.
At least I'll still be able to call you and hear your sexy voice.
I gave you so much of my heart,
All I ask is that you keep it with you rather than tearing it apart.

^^ I'm not really sure about this stanza. I think you could have done a better job with the wording. It just seems to be thrown together.

Distance will not make a difference of where you lay in my heart.
You will always hold a spot whether we are together or apart.
Not seeing you for so long will be extremely hard.
Just remember that I will always love you no matter if you're near or far.

^^Now the last stanza was perfect. I wouldn't change a thing about it. I feel like if the entire was as emotional and heartfelt as the ending, this would be an all around amazing write. Great job with the rhyme here.

Overall, you did a pretty good job. I believe that with a few grammar changes, it could be better. But, the suggestions I made were only suggestions. I am not trying to change your work, just trying to help. I hope you don't think otherwise. I decided to give this a 4/5 because I don't really think that it is a 5. It could use some work. Continue writing. You are very talented.

--Kay Jay