Comments : Urgency.

  • 9 years ago

    by Sylvia

    It is sad. Missing someone does make us feel like this. Well done.

  • 9 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Urgency vibrates within my heart-
    as eyes become blinded
    by another downpour of need;
    time hangs by icicles.

    I like this verse very much. Its a beautiful way of describing the pain & tears.
    A touching write..

  • 9 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    A very emotional piece Temps that fills the soul with sadness. Well-penned as usual and I am sorry you are feeling this way, we all go through this hard time of losing a loved one whoever they might be. God bless!

    ~MaryAnne

  • 9 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    Waist-deep in thought-
    myriad tears fall;
    a tepid touch to my cheeks-
    an anesthetic kiss.

    ^^ woa these are brilliantly written... captured me froimthe start... loved the term anesthetic kiss ... well phrased...

    reticent lips taste serenity
    as solitude morphs into chimera-
    temporarily escaping loneliness-

    ^^ sometimes even the thoughts make us handle the loneliness... beautifully written

    lovely and sad write...

  • 9 years ago

    by Cindy

    Temps
    You have portrayed the longing for someone who is no longer there. It brought tears to my eyes.

    replant that burning passion
    within this soul my love-
    I miss you all too much.

    It is so hard to soothe the pain of losing someone you love. Great imagery in this piece. I loved your ending. Seems no matter how hard we try to forget and move on those feelings just keep coming back.
    Great job!
    Love Cindy

  • 9 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Wow... this poem is so deep and so beautiful.... I loove it! I love the meaning behind it... Great job!

  • 9 years ago

    by Lu

    Urgency vibrates within my heart-
    as eyes become blinded
    by another downpour of need;
    time hangs by icicles.
    ^^^
    This stanza is pure brilliance !

    "another down pour of need"
    ... "time hangs by icicles"

    I couldn't even begin to express the feeling these lines give me. Amazing lines that just stick to your mind ....

    I miss you all too much. <--- an ending that leaves the reader with a lump in their throat.

    Excellent read Temps and so very touching!

  • 9 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    Waist-deep in thought-
    myriad tears fall;

    *Not sure why but this line seemed like it was missing something. I'd say "myriad tears fall fast" or something like that*

    a tepid touch to my cheeks-
    an anesthetic kiss.

    *Love these last two lines. The imagery they evoke are very stong and almost heartbreaking to think about. Nice*

    reticent lips taste serenity
    as solitude morphs into chimera-
    temporarily escaping loneliness-
    embraced by your touch.

    *I think this had to be my favorite stanza. I can really relate to that feeling and it makes me sad to think about it. I love the diction and how well this stanza flows.*

    urgency vibrates within my heart-
    as eyes become blinded
    by another downpour of need;
    time hangs by icicles.

    *I hate this feeling. Needing something or someone and not knowing when you will ever get it. I like that you used the title here. Very real emotion I think a lot of us can relate to.*

    replant that burning passion
    within this soul my love-
    I miss you all too much.

    *That last line really hits home for me. I think this was brillant and I'm glad I stopped by to read it. You're a rockstar :) keep up the good work. Nik*

  • 9 years ago

    by ilikepurple222

    I love the uncertainty and also the fact that you still know what you want. it's great :)