Letting myself fall

I dont want to defend myself anymore
Im sick of trying
Im sick of fightning

*this stanza is great! love that you opened the poem this way. im sure lots of readers will be able to relate! lots of pain in 3 lines.

Im letting go of myself
Im letting myself fall
Im letting myself hurt

*nice repetition here of the im letting. i like the way you show your hurt instead of telling. it's so much better to let the reader see it.

Im sick of trying to fix things
If something breaks
I wont try to mend it anymore

I'll take the blows
Hit me
I'll take the pain
Hurt me

* these stanzas are absolutely perfect! a feeling of giving up, of no longer caring is expressed so well. giving in to the pain...the 2nd stanza hurts to read but its so good!!

I dont care
If I die in 5 minutes
I dont care
I just dont carel

*great way to end this piece strongly! repetition of i dont care is nice. love when you say in 5 minutes, is very dramatic and adds great imagery to the poem. the last line, should say "care" not "carel" thats the only error ;)

great job, one of your best! 5/5 katie