I love your word choice!
Your use of enjambment was impressive!
Good imagery and flow.
I also love how you added in the Greek, I found it clever and it sounded much better than if you would have said the same lines in English.
What an excellent job you have done on this beautifully penned piece!

This poem is truly stunning, what a beautiful write & even more beautiful that you incorporated a different language to speak the words of You're Beautiful & I love you. How captivating & gorgeous are your words. Nicely done

This piece kinda reminded me of my piece called Music in the Night. Especially the repetition of "you're beautiful". It gives you the soothing and calm feelings. Of course the form was also outstanding, this way it indicates where to pause and which line is accentuated.but i even love your ending. Oh my, I almost fainted hehe..How the "i love you" come so tender to my ear. Loved it!

What a beautiful and unique piece you have penned. Wonderful Imagery created for the minds eye.
Congrats on your win!
Take Care
Cindy

This is very unique!! I love it Mel. Though I had difficulty perceiving some parts. Your words choice, your metaphor, the imagery..everything is very well written masha'allah.
I admire this piece, and you did a great job!

Write on~

I remember showing this to Stephanie,
she was singing it..
specially the Greek parts,

and I was like
you're gonna miss the meaning
if you keep fooling around with the piece.

ah,you are even part
of my most precious memories.

love you.