Comments : Fortune Mis-sent

  • 14 years ago

    by Yakari Gabriel

    It's heart as cold as frost from yesteryear
    with Eternity it signs.

    ,,

    i loved the use of the word yesteryear here
    really clever.

  • 14 years ago

    by Melpomene

    Landy,

    I'm glad you used a title such as the one you did because as I told you [sorry for repeating myself lol] that it allows for the reader to feel as though you are having your palm read. That the palm reader is telling you about yourself and that is quite unique in my opinion..

    I liked the fact it ended where it did, however I was really wanting more, you know when you read a poem and you think wow is that it, I want more! that's how I felt with it, but it was still an interesting read none the less.

    The opening stanza was my favorite. Again another lovely read by you.

    -Mel.

  • 14 years ago

    by Lu

    So much said in such few words !
    Loved this piece from beginning to end Landy.

    with Eternity it signs.
    ^^^
    Powerful ending beneath a perfect title.

    Wonderful read!

  • 13 years ago

    by Ares

    Lovely language use here, really sicked me in and kept me reading, trying to understand it to some extent. I'm beginning to get more and more impressed by you so I'll definitly keep reading your poems and perhaps squeeze in a couple or more comments.

    --ares