That was a truly beautiful poem and it went through my mind like a motion picture, what we suffer through life, what we do and why we move on.

Now those ashes smolder before me
Screaming, the end
I choke on the remains
Inhaling every memory

My FAVORITE STANZA woot

Jenn,

Another stunning & beautiful poem by you. I know you have mentioned struggling to write but this.. this poem to me had everything a poem should have, especially the emotion & the heart. I felt that in your words.

I loved the opening, "stars catapult" how unique. I would never have thought of something so gorgeous. I could picture it in my head, the imagery of this piece was brilliant.

The only stanza I wasn't so keen on was the third, and that's only because all the other stanza's held so much creativity that the images here weren't as elaborate.

I really found this poem to be inspiring, The ending allowed the reader to become inspired by what you are inspired by, which is in this case, the night, moon and stars which remind you to dream.

I can't pick a favorite from this poem, but like I mentioned, I adored the beginning stanza, it really grasped my attention and my heart.

Well done on a clever and inspiring poem. I've been complaining to myself as of late about wanting to use different themes and such in my poem, and the use of some wording here has allowed me to think of new ideas. Thanks Jenn :]

Well done.
-Mel

Jen, what a wonderful read. I always love the simplicity of your words and how they amaze me with its reflective meaning. Moon, stars and night, for me they represent an uncertain future thus totally fits with your ending.

Now those ashes smolder before me
Screaming, the end
I choke on the remains
Inhaling every memory
^^these are my favourite lines.

Another excellent piece from you. :]

Beautiful poem... loved the flow of feelings... well expressed...

//I cut ties with the world
Though I'm not sure when
Years spent in denial
Have blurred my vision//
^^these verses touched me ... well written,..

Now those ashes smolder before me
Screaming, the end
I choke on the remains
Inhaling every memory

^^ brilliantly penned... found them so powerful and touching...

well penned write...