This poem is really good, I liked it all the way through. It felt like a very long story... At some parts it felt too long, but the rhymes and imagery words you put into this made it interesting even though the lengh. This poem is sad, about a girl with a prolonged nightmare called life, have nothing to critisize about it, just keep it up 5/5

Wow this poem really stood out to me. I loved that it read like a story. I love the depth off this piece. Very creative and well written and it held my attention the whole time. Again the flow was nice here and so was the imagery. A very strong piece indeed. I enjoyed reading. Keep it up. Nik

Hmm. That was an..interesting poem. I enjoyed it, but I was kindof thrown for a loop by the rhyme scheme. I'll admit *meekly* that I've done some weird things with my rhymes before, but your rhyme scheme went kinda haywire lol. It was good for the first stanza, then switched lines the next, then did both the next two, and it was just confusing me. It messed up the flow for me, and while I enjoyed the poem, maybe a little more consistancy with your rhyming would be helpful. You are a very talented writer, though (: I look forward to the next read.

This is beautifully written!! its an emotional masterpiece i loved reading. you have the beginnings of a great poet keep up the good work!!