A very touching piece. You gave us a glimpse into the world of an ICU bed and the person that is there. The emotions were strong and the images very real. Well done.

You described the atmosphere of a hospital very well, the emotions of the patient, ect. It was one of your more lengthy poems but I enjoyed it very much, you had me hooked from beginning to end. Awesome write Cindy

Good imagery and insight into time spent in the hospital. This piece can be interpreted a couple different ways-the light in the room or the light as in a near death experience. Very sad that this poem is inspired by actual events.

A very sad and heartfelt write. you are loved by many. just try to keep faith in the Lord. love your son john

Every stanza draws an image of feelings one would be feeling when the time comes. Its scary and yet so emotional. Even i would call it as NDE & being selfish, i am so glad that mom was there in those moments.

Its a great great write dear, takes you on emotional rollercoaster before everything just stops.

Glad you released.

all the best and take care

Cindy, sometimes we go through life struggles and thinking that God is deaf to our worries, and we get the feeling of despair and the feeling that we no longer want to be here.But, he is alive and he is healing.
I know of the pain you are going through and no matter how easy I try to make my words to you, it's you that is going through it.
Our savior does not give us anymore than we can bear.
You are a fighter Cindy.You've weathered many storms and this bout of illness is no different, you will weather it and will win.

Like all your beautiful writes, this one brought the tears to my eyes for the very essence of emotion is portrayed vividly.
Take care my friend.
You are always in my prayers and thoughts.
Your friend forever,
Paul...

Gosh I love how you let the readers experience how is it to be hospitalized from your perspective.

"I need to hear your heart beat,
my lullaby from the womb.
Take me back to that time,
release me from life's torture.
So tired, how much longer can I go on.
Soon very soon.......
you will be free to fly."

^^^
I really like how you phrase this stanza, I can really feel how the protagonist wants to be free from life's torture.

Truly you have woven the words nicely together to share this lovely piece.

Excellent Job

Hi Cindy it sure has been a while since i have been on, so here is my first comment in a long while. I found your poem to be very emotional (maybe because i have been there myself) and extremely sad. It sounds rather like your own bed at home has been made your prison and not the hospital bed as some have said. I can understand so well the sentiment for release at the end of the poem, and found that i could relate very well to the whole heart wrenching write. Well done and stay strong. Grant

As I read this I could see a soul stuck within the walls of machine & pain unable to be free from a writhering pain..a soul which yearns for freedom..a touching write..take care.

A very honest look at pain written with great skill

This is a very emotional write that would leave a lot of unfortunate people nodding in understanding. Well written and all the best,
Ben