There is a splinter in my eye
that entered unapproved.
It made its way into my life
and needs to be removed.

*This stanza was so creative. Wow. I couldn't stop reading it, it really captured my eyes and made me want to know what's going to happen in the next poem. The imagery was perfect and really drew me into the piece. Very clever poem :]] Can't wait for the next part. Nik*

Hmmm....interesting. I think this is a creative story you have written for us. I was unable to see what was happening until close to the end. A good write non the less. Good job and keep writing.

...told u .u czn write short stories and i was right ( as always ) :P..

u keep ones reader so intrested..since u veil up the expectations...realy u sound so professional...im gna hop yo read part 2..amazing job... but why so spooky... haha

brilliant
5/5

...told u .u czn write short stories and i was right ( as always ) :P..

u keep ones reader so intrested..since u veil up the expectations...realy u sound so professional...im gna hop yo read part 2..amazing job... but why so spooky... haha

brilliant
5/5

My mentor for the Midnight Madness Book is Mickey Spillane,was a good friend of my father.
Now he was a master of murder mysteries. Thanks everyone so far for reading I hope the rest of the book doesn't disappoint you. It gets spookier :-)

Ronald, Wow, this poem flows so well. Great rhythm. Really great job. Very dark indeed. 5/5

Hey DED , thanks for reading and commenting, there are 13 chapter to the entire Midnight Madness Book, I am posting them one a day , take a look if you dare (evil laugh) :-)

'Twas a good piece. I liked the narrative of it and the agreeable rhymes. You're obvioously someone who appreciates words, and doesn't just throw them in willy-nilly. Glorious.

I also like that there's other installments. I'll get round to reading them at some point.

Brad

P.S. Please comment and vote on every poem you read.