This is such a sad, heartfelt write that you have penned. Your images are very vivid and your poem is also beautifully expressed. Very Well Done :)

Lots of Love, Olwin.

This really touches my heart Water is one of the essentials for life of the four elements earth, fire, water and wind you must also remember that as the master reflects you sorrow comes from the same well where you have drawn joy
<< Psalm 104:16 >>

The trees of the LORD are well watered, the cedars of Lebanon that he planted.

The imagery is very beautiful I cannot say enough about the debth of the poem

When the darkness of my
hair, flirts with the breeze

^^Hair that flirts with the breeze..I think the way you worded this made the reader realize how alone you must be feeling

When the beats of my heart
pump bitter tears

^^
To have only tears in your hart, oh Nana:(

When those tears ripple
stories about falling leaves

^^^
Dwelling on sadness is what this is about

and the gardens of my being
become fields of naked trees

^^
I actually saw a field with dead trees as I read this, and I love the metaphor, it is very accurate

and the sweetness of flowers
turns sour, as its fading color
lacks the beauty to please

^^
Lacks the beauty to please..wow! Good wording!!!!!

When the rage of my sorrow
beats the waves of stormy seas

^^
I can feel anger and resentment within these lines, about the hows and whys no doubt?

As I wake up facing the truth
after sinking in pleasant dreams

^^
This is very familiar to me, to wake up and then realize you lost that person

and how I miss your love

When I plant these pity hopes
in barren fields , and around
thirsty streams ..

^^
I like that you gave the reader a hint of hope in the end.

Beautiful work, Nana..I can relate to it well.

Stay strong sweetie

*hugs*

5/5 Ingrid

WOW. oh my god, this was just beautiful! Such gentle words and crazy images you have created. A beautiful piece. I loved it ! I also like your rhyme scheme :D good work matey !!

Wow, I found this one amazing , I dont even know how to describe it. Maybe contrastingly
explicit is the term I am looking for .
The way you described all your feelings in contrast, yet I felt a similarity within each one . Beautiful flow of expression , so easy to read & understand 5/5 .....Jim

10/10 this poem is very similar to one of mines so i can kind of relate but anyways this has to be one of the best poems i've read in a long time

Nice...it was beautiful

Awwww... I love this poem! I can really relate... and it always makes me feel better when I feel that way. Excellent job with this poem. I loved every metaphor! Take care! :)

This is absolutely beautiful. I read it aloud and was moved by how the words sounded coming from my mouth. Is that vain? Haha! Very, very beautiful. I'm at a loss for words.

Wow your really guud i love this poem and im glad to have youhh as muh friend lol thanks again
5/5

"When those tears ripple
stories about falling leaves

and the gardens of my being
become fields of naked trees"

Awesome awesome awesome lines, theyre breath taking. Over all very cool idea as far as flow and form for this and the rhyming was clever and fit well. 5/5 very nice

Ahw, I Adored This Poem.
You Have Some Great Talent, I Envy It.
Make's My Poems Look Rubish:P Haha.
I Love your Style Of Writing, And How you Just Say All That you Need To Say.
And Also A Very Nice Flow=D
5/5
Can You Comment And Rate One Of My Poems Too? That Would Be Great!
Much Love, Jessi<3

Wow ur good haha 5/5

When those tears ripple
stories about falling leaves

EPIC !!!!