This is a very thought provoking poem that was well thought out and nearly perfectly done. Nice use of alliteration. The exception to my thought on it being perfect was that in my mind I believe the number 24 should have been spelled out. I know it is more aesthetically pleasing to just have the number there but, I felt it was a lazy way out. However, I still give this poem a top score because I felt that infraction was so minor and the rest of the poem overshadowed it. Awesome Job!

Take Care,
Kay

Wow this was indeed a thought provoking poem. So many things have been said in this poem that are so true with what is happening to the world around us slowly. Even though this was a nature poem the sorrow and sadness was still evident in this piece and makes one think more about the earth around him. Also the great imagery you use is very keen in letting the reader see what is happening and you did a great job with that as well. Good job and keep writing.

You have painted the picture of the world so vivdly for the reader we can not help but feel a range of emotions as we read through the poem. Very well written, the flow went seemlessly, a credit to your skill as a word smith. Keep up the great stuff, I look forward to what you will pen next.

Though the free flow is wonderful, it is the natural message that has power for me

A lot of bitterness and despair in your words, Nick. When you look around it is indeed hard to stay cheerful, I agree.

Poisoned scarred landscape
A patch work quilt
Blighted
Blistered
Bleeding
Do Butterflies hover, flowers bejewel?
No, no pretty pictures here
Only hell
Only despair

^^
Really strong wording in this part, the alliteration gave it even more power.

Well done,

5/5 Ingrid

The very beginning
Foretold our very end....
that line goes hard truely a beautiful poem that corresponds with how i'm feelin right now !Legacy!