Oh wow, this is actually my first time reading a poetry in this form, and with so many repetitions you still managed to create such a beautiful piece. Good work here! It was quite the gentle piece. Kudos :)

A very strict approach with the form. The line which was repeated was effective. I found it suited with the rest of the lines. I have noticed your love for form poetry. I normally like to read form poetry if not free versed. At your age, I can tell you have that rare talent with you. Keep up the good work and thanks for the comments. :)

Jeff, I know summer is over, but do you have to remind me !!! :-) good read

I like this form and you are getting really
good at each of the form you use. The poem
in itself is like a trip down memory lane..well
done!