Comments : Free me from self ...

  • 13 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Irritability reigns
    over all,
    frustration is its companion.

    What an excellent stanza this is which potrays
    the burning frustration within and its is true
    that irritability & frustration are friends!

    Serenity is forsaken
    in refusal to accept that
    which cant be changed

    Another true fact here! We do tend to loose
    our peace when we cannot accept something...very well penned! Overall this
    write is something all of us can releate to when we can't seem to free from ourselves!

  • 13 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    I would pick a favorite stanza but I think you covered this subject very well.

  • 13 years ago

    by Sylvia

    Sometimes self is the most dangerous person we have to deal with. Freedom is hard to come by when that happens.

  • 13 years ago

    by Sungrl And Mrs Whatsit

    It is difficult not to get personal when the work is sounding so personal......so:

    Your poetic cry is not only very well articulated, it is dripping with raw authenticity.. also, it is descriptive of a very normal condition to be experienced in the upward striving work of developing consciousness and meaning in life...

    "Free me from self ... "
    well....this just can't be done...and....
    careful what you wish for...
    your Self has other business than escape...
    I promise.

    I respectfully suggest that
    existential pain and anguish can be, and as I have witnessed, has been, alleviated by heartfelt and careful prayer...
    There really is More of Great Significance yet to be discovered .....and I do believe, based on the depth demonstrated in this piece, that you do know this.......
    Strive On.

  • 13 years ago

    by Dreamofolwin

    Congrats on your win Ronald! :) and a most deserving one i must say. WELL DONE!

  • 13 years ago

    by Sunshine

    P.charming..
    this was a very very unique poem..the title was a very catchy line..which I was really caught by.
    I love the way you worded it and the words u chose..u have impressed me b4, so it is nothing new.

    but truly am so glad to see you wining, because this just Deserved.!

    5/5
    sure

  • 13 years ago

    by Lu

    Congrats on the weekly win. Very deserving indeed.

  • 13 years ago

    by silvershoes

    You used a few of my favorite words which earned you instant brownie points: reign, forsaken, stagnant & fleeting. Good word choices and for this particular poem, less is more.
    The brief stanzas are easy to read and the content is relatable. We each endure our unique agony and soulful discontent. Nicely expressed here.

  • 13 years ago

    by celia stock

    Nicely written Ronald.

  • 13 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Congrats on the win!

  • 13 years ago

    by Andrew

    Thank you for this poem that is all

  • 13 years ago

    by Ronald Edwards

    I graciously thank you all for these kind comments