Wow, this is really good. I love that you included that the bed you dove under was "well-known" but that something wasn't right about the whole thing. It's that whole thought about the nightmare that everything that you know, the bed, your house, family, friends, etc, is as you said filled with harm. This captures that feeling of fear and familiarity with that little skewered feeling of something feeling off. I really like this, and I like the overall flow of it. This is very well done, seems like the time off didn't hurt a bit =]

This Was Amazing And SOOO full Of detail.
A Lil Long But Did Not Drag On Which Is A Good Thing For Shur.
Keep Writing, and I'll Keep Reading!:)
-jesssi

I really liked this piece just the way it is now. I don't normally write poems like this because the rhyming seems forced and you lose the meaning of the poem and I

Sorry lol

But I was saying I felt like you didn't do that. You kept the meaning of the poem true thoughout and I enjoyed that. I also liked how you built the story up. I loved the imagery as well as the diction. A very good poem indeed. Sorry about the split comment. Keep it up Nik

I read this through a few times and the more that I read it, the better it got and the more that I felt the tension and the atmosphere of it.

It flows really well, although I found myself struggling in a couple of places:

Firstly with the 2nd stanza due to lines 2 & 4 I think having too many syllables - not sure how to change it though!

Secondly in the 5th stanza with the rhyming not being the same. I'm wondering whether the lack of rhyming can be disguised better by changing the 4th line (eg And listen to the floorboard creak).

A couple of spelling issues unless deliberate - I think the first word of the fifth stanza should be spelt They're and cant should be can't

The only other suggestion is whether replacing Everyone with Everything
in the last stanza might be more powerful.

Hope you don't mind my suggestions - I'm not an expert so if you don't agree with them you are probably right :)

And even as it stands I thought it was an excellent poem.

This poem kept me glued to the story ufolding, though the Great rhyme scheme not did go unnoticed

I'm happy for you that you've began writing again after a few years. This poem is particularly good when you take into consideration how long you HAVEN'T been writing for.

The overall story is accurate to what I believe most people feel during a nightmare. The anxiety, fear and downright terror is evident in every stanza and I feel this will help readers to relate to your words.

A problem I had was the rhyming; it seemed a little bit forced in some parts. Luckily the flow was good, so it's not overly evident how forced some words are unless you really think about it. Just remember, you don't always have to have things rhyme to make it poetry or to make it flow. If you can't think of something to rhyme, then don't just pick something and hope it works. Just write what makes sense, what tells the story without trying to make it into something it isn't.

This kind of poetry reminds me a lot of my old poetry, so it was nice to read something that feels familiar, style-wise. Don't stop writing. :)

I really enjoyed it
"I know something isn't right,
I just cant seem to get away,
Wherever I run they will find me,
I close my eyes and start to pray"

This line i think you could play around with "prey" instead of "pray"

I think this is the most powerful verse in the poem.

"As they throw away the bed
And grab my trembling arm,
I recognize my house, my home,
Now filled with fear and harm"

You can feel the desperation emanating from it.

all in all a great read 5/5 from me:)