WOW nana, what a lovely beginning to this piece. "wishful seas" - so beautiful! Very tender word choice.

He tried, yes he tried,

still I saw him trying,


- I think the repetition fitted very well here, creating a nice effect. Emphasising 'try' also shows just how much he tried. Lovely!

'tears dripping like a passionate waterfall'
-SO BEAUTIFUL NANA!! very vivid images! Infact, i loved that entire stanza!

"time stole more of his years
 as he lost his entire soul'"
- i reallly like this line! So sad, yet so beautifully put together.

"were duress stomped hardly upon"
- where

Wow nana, beautiful beautiful work! Every bit of this was so heart breaking and sad. A very passionate write, and I just LOVE the ending. Amazing work!

Nana,

I once read a quote by a woman who wished her love to be free, even of her..and I slowly begin to understand her words..love can keep a heart hostage and it can make a person a slave. I often feel I should not want my significant other to love me back, but for him to be free and not feel the pain that love always brings.

Well written, it made the tears flow freely upon my tired face.

You do so well, sweetie pie

Love you

5/5 Ingrid

Poetry.

This also takes my breath away with outstanding flow, imagery and the depth that takes days to ponder...very inspiring

Beautiful, so much emotion in this poem.

"I glimpse him stripping the leaves
of disowned roses.
ones he planted, and she forgot to take!"

simple yet powerful line.

great read, thank you

Jessie