Comments : Chapter 1: A Love Unexplainable!

  • 13 years ago

    by ChallengexEverything

    Oh wow that was really cute! I wish my boyfriend would write me something like that.

    Very nice hun :)
    5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by RadianceInReverse

    This was beautifully written i really really like it :)

  • 13 years ago

    by Lesbian Natalie

    That is a very sweet poem, and you did a great job!!! I like it a lot.... 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Dark Secrets

    Beautiful... I liked the way your first stanza matches the other stanza... it gives your poem a parallell feel. I don't know whether you did that on purpose or not, but it's really creative.
    You've managed to organize your poem into a rhyming system and used appropriate metaphors, which gave your poem flow.
    keep it up!

  • 13 years ago

    by Sunshine

    :) I love the love between your lines..pretty obvious.
    you had some deep deep lines, yet between me and you :P you dif force it a little for the sake of the rhyming.

    I love the title..and i love the great feelings you penned down.
    If you aimed to show her , how much this guy in the poem..loves this woman in the poem.

    then you're there!
    5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Rozanna

    This is really nice, really sincere. (:
    Really liked it.

  • 13 years ago

    by Infinitychanges

    That is a super sweet poem, however even more importantly you chose your words well and it was really descriptive and well-expressed. Makes me wish I was the you wrote it for :)

  • 13 years ago

    by kmx210

    That was serene. the flow was easy and melodic.

    like a weapon that cuts through my enemy, your are my know, amazing, what a way to describe your love. im going to continue reading your chapters now. great job

  • 12 years ago

    by Rihanna

    Beatiful I actually really like this(:

    When I talk to you, heavily my heart pounds,
    Just the thought of you, make fly off the ground.
    Knowing that I have you, gives me a reason for this life,
    Dreaming that one day, you will be with me as my wife!

    ^^
    My fav stanza from the poem(: !
    Knowing that when you hear her voice your heart pounds fast, knowing she's the only thing making your life worth while and some day she might be your wife...who ever you wrote this for is really lucky kris:)

    Beatiful write!!
    100/100