I really like this poem a lot because I have written several poems like this but I think yours hit more of the emotions I was trying to get at but I was unable to. Anyway like I said there are plenty of emotions in here, mostly sad ones and depressing ones. The flow was really good as well. You had some wonderful descriptions in this poem, which made it nice to read as there are mental images coming to mind as one reads.

Overall you did a wonderful job but I hope this poem isn't about you. Still such sadness and gloom looms over this poem and with its message the reader is left with a deep hurting feeling inside. Great job and keep writing.

This poem is a mixture of pain, sadness and a bit of anger as well as deep. I also like the
images your words draw in my mind..well penned and take care.