Monster like you

by Hopeless Romantic   Jan 11, 2011


I know what a broken heart feels like
messed up and damaged inside
why would you resurrect me
only to plot and kill me again
to have me to become
a conscienceless zombie
a monster within

No more tears for my heart
further and further apart
wrenched in two
yea it's through
you can tell me i was an idiot
you can even say i was stupid
I was part of the divended
until i was part of the bullsh*t

Became part of the sensation
caught up in the fire
Boy you a liar
I can feel my fangs growing
a vampire
time for the biting
suck the life out
another murder scene
crawling the night
in your nightmares to fright

See what you made me become
when you placed that
Poisoned dagger through my heart
made me crave for the end of you
til i was crazed
wishing it was through
Til i pictured a view
what a lifeless clue
now you got me howling at the moon
now im a monster just like you

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  • 13 years ago

    by mrsmoore

    I have to say, I really do see great potential in this piece! Honestly, I think you should edit it. Take your time and rearrange it. The first stanza got me interested, but half way through the poem, I started to lose interest. I would like to read it again if you work on it! Let me know!

  • 13 years ago

    by Hopeless Romantic

    Thank is was just kind of in a hurry typing this out

  • 13 years ago

    by DeafBeats

    This could become a really great piece if you fix up the grammar a little bit because you've got great ideas there. The poem started out really good but the last two stanzas dragged it out and made it lose it's flow.

    divended - is not a word (please check the spelling)

    Boy you a liar
    ^^^
    Would probably sound better as [boy, you liar] or [boy, you're a liar]

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