Comments : Spring View (Haiku Chain)

  • 13 years ago

    by Melissa

    Yes, I concur. The first is definitely my favorite, so pretty. Although they're all wonderful in their own right. Haiku is a tough form, and you did quite well I must say.

    Great job, dear Queen! (:

  • 13 years ago

    by Colm

    I agree that the first stanza is the best. It gives nice imagary with excellent wording. The second two dont add much for me, and seem less natural/original and more ordinary.
    'off over the field with grin' - This doesnt sound quite right, it should be 'a grin' but then it wouldnt fit into the haiku form.

  • 13 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    I think all your stanzas were well written and gave off great imagery, however I think the first was probably the best and the third was the weakest, I was kind of hoping for something stronger at the end, but truly it's a beautiful nature poem regardless. :)

  • 13 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    Very beautiful imagery which trancends an ordinary natural setting

  • 13 years ago

    by The Queen

    The third Haiku is about a frog sitting in a pond with reflection of a mountain on the water :)

  • 13 years ago

    by Aureus Argentum

    I swear I commented on this before, lol. I love haiku's, and I always enjoy a row of them all together. :) Great write, buddy!!! <3 <3 You're awesome.