Comments : The Stranger

  • 13 years ago

    by Sunshine

    Lol I mean by rest as if I shall continue my life or..try get back :P

    A good lookin' one

    (YES!!!) LOL

  • 13 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    I sink in the
    surge of multilingual skies,
    yet I never understand a word.
    ^I've never heard 'multilingual' used in this way...but I definitely like it...very creative.

    Exclamation marks tap at the end of my
    side, celebrating for rationales I'm
    unaware of,
    ^I kind of interpreted this in two ways, either this person makes you feel this happy or maybe these 'exclamation points' are trying to tell you something. On a side note, I don't think you need 'at the end' here.

    A nice write here, only thing I'd really suggest changing are your line breaks, it seems you just keep writing and placing commas every so often.

  • 13 years ago

    by Jad

    Hmmm.... I think I am still jealous and I have two more poems after this one! :P Nana, this poem was really interesting and I love how you use the title within the poem in some spots and I can see you have a interesting word choice throughout the poem, which is never a bad thing. The flow was good and for some reason I found the rhyming in the first stanza distracting. It was probably just me but I have no idea why I didn't like it. :/ I would personally keep it though. :]

    Couldn't find one stanza that I liked the most as I found that they were all linked in a special way and if taking one out and saying it was better would not be right. You Really know how to keep a flow going and also a message which one can easily see, reading your poetry.

    In all, you are ever increasing in your skills and I really like how you are always trying new things and putting yourself out there with your emotions being true to everyone! So once again, great job and I am really taken away as always by your wonderful poems! Great job and keep writing! :]