Heart break through words that ring through very creatively here with this poem. hope writing has eased the pain and released the hurt somewhat.

I like the way you started the first two verses with
If you only knew.

This poem is almost like sonnet, with the words.

But I know deep in my soul
Ill forever want your kiss.

I love this line, its sounds like really desperation. In some cases desperation is bad, but not in this case. It is sweet. While reading this you feel for the person, and want them too get with the lover

Your poem is good i like the way you ended it not only tieing up th peice but being witty aswell
Raindrops,
4/5

This piece of poetry reminded me of the beginnings of my poetry when I was a younger girl. It's very basic and the feelings are truly raw. There is no flub or any fluffy words that make you feel better and happy and sappy. It's just straight to the point. Very good piece of writing :) You have potential, just need to hone your skills. 4/5