Comments : Transformation.

  • 13 years ago

    by Sunshine

    Oh I loved this poem;
    very meaningful..

    opening lines lost me a bit, since u separated the 3rd line from "a wolf.."
    but then it worked well when i reached the line;

    amazing! as a result

    or perhaps like paradise,

    when I am a whale
    staggering alongside shores
    of palm trees yet

    ^^^
    fantastic image ! I adore this part, was very fresh and i loved the idea of it,..i love how
    you are describing yourself..seriously this poem is perfect..but hey hey hey didn't u just tell me
    about the question mark when not asking a real question huuuuhh so

    overcoming death from
    disintegrated emotion?
    ^^
    yes young lady..take it off :P

    I rebirth with beauty
    each time I transform
    yet never straying
    from my actual being,
    ^^
    how meaningful!!..how inspiring!
    how flowing and well said...
    you just wrote something seriously perfect this time and clear.

    I love the ending, not very special since we hear it a lot, but definitely effective

    5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Melpomene

    This poem interested me from the start. I love mythology and I got that from this poem. It was intriguing the way you mentioned characteristics of a shape-shifter and gave different animals in order to symbolize a different meaning. The contrast between the whale and wolf captured my attention, two creatures so different. This poem reminded me of two different personalities. Almost like wearing a comedy and tragedy mask. Perphaps this wasn't your attention but that's what I gathered from it and that's what makes a good poem, when somebody can write something and capture the audience on a whole other level. This was again filled with creative metaphors.

    Pleasure to read.
    -Mel