Comments : Field of Dreams (Haiku)

  • 9 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    This poem has started from my fav color 'Green' & then it just paints an image in mind & its so beautiful as already mentioned in title 'dreams'.

    This poem reminds me of those highway scenes in movies with green fields...beautifully written.
    Welcome Back.

    all the best and take care

  • 9 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Oh..yes this sums up the feeling of a field of
    dreams...liked ths Haiku!

  • 9 years ago

    by Sylvia

    Cindy, I could see the field, the flowers, grass swaying with the wind. You did what was intended with the few words allowed, you gave the reader a wonderful image to take with them.

  • 9 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    Such a peaceful poem :] Thanks for sharing it with us. Nice work deary. -Nik

  • 9 years ago

    by Dreamofolwin

    This created a lovely picture in my mind... Serene, pretty and calm! :)) Thanku Cindy! - Loved this by you.

  • 4 years ago

    by cassie hughes

    Lovely. Peaceful and perfectly evocative of a beautiful summers day in the country. :)

  • 4 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Cindy,
    This is beautiful, but I am going to annoy you here, but I know you won't mind as it's meant in the best of ways.

    "Wild" is one of those words that sounds like it has two syllables when you say it but in fact has one, bringing the syllable count of line 2 down to 6 instead of 7.

    What about changing wild to "untamed" - keeping the "wild" theme but just pushing that syllable count up? Just a suggestion and it is entirely up to you.

    In truth, it is a word that baffles me - I had to check to make sure!

    Anyway, the imagery and beauty of this piece are wonderful - all the very best,
    Ben