Comments : Breezing Sweat

  • 8 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    Awwh this was sad but still sweet at the same time. I could feel the pain when you talked about nightmares and screams. But I could also feel the happiness when you talked about being safe with each other. A very nice poem indeed. Thanks for sharing -Nik

  • 8 years ago

    by Sylvia

    I have to agree with Nik, love and sadness in your words, anguish and joy, in other words, mixed emotions. As you drift off to sleep, the dreams and nightmares begin and after a night of these, you wake, put on that smile and face the world, no one the wiser for what you have been through.

  • 8 years ago

    by Jad

    Talk about messing with peoples emotions! Your love in this poem is outstanding but it is soo clear to see the sadness in each line and your story brings out a care for this person. You have penned a great piece and the feelings you portray in this poem shows that you care a lot for this person.

    In all, you have done a great job with this poem and getting your feelings out. I love the simplicity of this and how many people can relate to your words and feel the pain you feel and be able to agree with everything you have written. I hope your poems become happier in the future and the aspects change in your messages. Great job and keep writing.

  • 8 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    A love poem with a mixture of pain, sadness and tender sweetness. From start to finish each verse is my favorite...very nicely written..take care.

  • 8 years ago

    by Cindy

    Once again your pen has weaved magic in your words.

    Justifying self created composure
    Dreaming is worth sleeping for
    Nightmares don't dare come close
    While I knock at memory's door

    How nice it would be to be able to go back to times when love was new and simple. Before life makes things complicated and brings negative feelings to relationships. Where sleep is the place where we can bring back all the sinple loving times once more. If only we could live in our dreams.

    Seems we survived another night
    Time has come to enter dreams
    Wake up with sound of birds
    And smile to conceal screams

    Waking to a new day. Smiling and pretending things are good. When we are really crying inside.
    Excellent job yaar!
    Love Cindy

  • 8 years ago

    by Princess Love

    You give love a completely different meaning in your poems. Its been ages since I've read one of these... I must say, you improve with each new one. Enjoyed reading it... brought back so many memories.

    PS. have u read your PM?

  • 8 years ago

    by Decayed

    That was so sweet and tende..
    a very gd flow, and it worked so well!

  • 8 years ago

    by wilma elizabeth rosalin

    Ohh what a good poem :))

  • 8 years ago

    by Lost Soul 691

    Feeling the pain and sadness, yet a tinge of hope for the new day! Even though one smiles to conceal. Nice read. :)