Noo!! you must come back to the light side :] This was a good poem dear. Very simple but still makes the reader wonder what's happening to you. Love the simple imagery as well. Thanks for sharing deary :] -Nik
funny how something so calm and peaceful could be so mentally destructive. this spoke to me, personally. to quote Edgar Allen Poe, "Words have no power to impress the mind without the exquisite horror of their reality."
to me this is a little too real. it is somewhat reassuring that there are others who feel the same way.
A very interesting poem that really portrays the human mind. Though we ought to seek the light we are naturally drawn to the darkness. Your words are strong and the poem in all is very simplistic, which gave it a strong foundation that is easy to understand and relate to. The poem flowed with ease and though this poem was short, the message was clear and strong. Imagery was also another key aspect in this poem that really brought it to life with emotions and vividness.
In all, your poem has a story and a theme that many people can relate to and that is what makes this poem so strong and powerful. It can easily speak to many people. You are growing as a poet in both depth and maturity and this poem portrays that evidence. hope you continue to write pieces that are thought provoking and keep me on the edge of my seat. :] Great job and keep writing!