I loved this poem.An invisible death has happened to one of my friend's.Invisible is the perfect way to describe a person that shows signs of depression,but no one seems to see. Making the wanting to die and kill yourself much stronger.Amazing poem....

This is heartrending, but very good. Invisible is a perfect adjective.

This is a very sad poem and situation. My heart is full of pain for you. People can't see though thier own eyes. Everything most people do are because they were told this or that, or saw it someplace. People need to focus on the real problem.....Other people....We were a good people once...I wish i can tell you we will be again.....but I don't see that coming anytime soon. Please rethink your situation...There ARE people, just like me that do care about people who want that "invisable Death...Please write and talk to me...Please....Take great care and listen to my words....Please.....Mike

This is a very sad poem and situation. My heart is full of pain for you. People can't see though thier own eyes. Everything most people do are because they were told this or that, or saw it someplace. People need to focus on the real problem.....Other people....We were a good people once...I wish i can tell you we will be again.....but I don't see that coming anytime soon. Please rethink your situation...There ARE people, just like me that do care about people who want that "invisable Death...Please write and talk to me...Please....Take great care and listen to my words....Please.....Mike

Awesome writing keep it up5/5

A little sorrow goes a long way. Your diction was clear and you painted a picture with every line. I like that you have dialogue in here, it truly brings this to life and makes more of a movie in my mind than a picture. While your rhythm and delivery may need some practice, you are still an artist and though this is the first poem of yours I've read, I see potential and a vivid imagination poised to strike the world into awe.