by Hadley Anne Jun 11, 2011
category :
Love, romance /
lasting love
Meet me by the still, cool lake |
by Colm
This si a good attempt for one of the first poems on the site. What I will say is that there are probably hundreads or thousands of poems like this on this site alone. While the sentiments in this poem may be strong and true, theres nothing original in it for the reader, its not hugely interesting or thought-provoking. Ill give you the advise to not get hung up about rhyme. Poems dont have to rhyme, most contempory ones dont. Especially in abab format. Parts of this seem forced and the wording is obviously arranged to follow a rhyme scheme. eg 'For stay we do not dare.' - It sounds here a little confused, I thought to myself 'shouldnt that be we dare not stay?' |