Austin I we have all felt like we are going insane. Maybe not for the reason in your write but still going insane. Much like I feel now. Good job.

This is really good

I'm speechless. I like every nook and cranny of this piece. It's raging with sadness, darkness, and anguish emotions. I'm touched with the flawlessly penned flow and the wording.

I so so so like this opening:
"Staring into a broken reflection
of tarnished imperfection"
It's a sinusoidal pace going in a one way direction, from small pain to bigger pain till the ultimate agony, and then to a strong collision.. --- "each pill breaks me down like a bug
reaching my limit I collapse."

^^ I suggest you add {'till} before 'I' because that way the flow is not interrupted.

The closing was spontaneous, I can tell, but some changes can make it perfect, I suggest:

"... because dying here in shame"
^^ as I'm dying here in shame

"...and now what do I have to show"
^^ and now I still have nothing to show

"..so I'm letting go. "
^^ as I'm forever letting go

I think it could be better this way, I suggest.

I was so touched with the gloomy atmosphere you've created.. so heartbreaking!

AWESOME JOB.. 5/5
and my next nomination!

Aww what a sad and touching write...
very expressive and well written

Its amazing how many people will be able to see this poem as being written for them. it is amazing and your style is one i'd like to see more.

5/5

JAd my god, is this a very strong dose for me just cause am fond of your sad poetry ?
Damn..Austin..this was very sad, like--very--sad!!

the title kind of sarcastic and no bet the type that makes me wanna get nosey and read..i actually voted days ago and waited to have time to comment..

ya so was saying 1st stanza was deeply rich with the general mood and opens doors for at am gna expect then..but i was wrong for this was not expected :

I'm finally letting go.
^
this just gave me goosebumps..

uu have this rhyme in ur words which made me enjoy this very much..but i was very depressed..its a killer..i hope it wins ..if i was a judge still id give it a 10 no bet!

I think I'm going insane
because dying here in shame

^how full of bitterness~!

I have pushed away everyone I know,
and having nothing to show

^^
and how hopeless..how fedup..how out of options..

i was so touched.. and remember.. sometimes letting go is yet the bessttt when at the same time it'd be the right to worse!

be wise, even when saddened :)
i love u! I love ur work! i love this 5/5!!

This is a write which all can relate to and the
depths of this write is felt very deeply..at
times one has to let go of things to become sane again...take care.

You always do a wonderful job on commenting my poems Jad. its a shame i cannot do as well as you. you have acquired an amazing skill for one so young. i know i can relate to this, in my own way. im sure others can as well. to quote E.A.Poe, " "Words have no power to impress the mind, without the exquisite horror of their reality." and that certainly rings true here.

as i would also like to be helpful in the ways of constructive criticism, i noticed in the first 2 stanza's you followed the format rhyming of:
A
A
B
B
C

but in the last stanza you changed the last line in such that it was:
A
A
B
B
B

and if i wanted to be nit-picky, not all the starting lines are capitalized. but i assume that the ones that are are only capitalized because of the New sentence. either way is fine for me, actually :)

this is actually one of my favorites of yours. thank you for sharing, and no matter what, dont stop writing.
reading the last line, "I'm finally letting go." it is an obvious climax. done perfectly that the feeling this piece creates lingers long after the words have been read. and epic ending. i prefer it this way much more. so please do not alter it to match the form. what makes poetry so great to read is it ability to relay the feelings of the author. to me that is much more important than following any format precisely. i think you have read enough of my poetry to know that by now.

I think this is a very good piece ^_^!!! I really like they emotion u put in to it.

Very expressive, and emotional 5/5

Your poem paints your current scenario very clearly. I hope you find the courage to let go of your attachments and find the happiness that has always dwelled inside you. Good luck

Sad Fellings make Big Poems, Amazing 5/5

I can relate to this piece, spot on. I'm sorry you felt or may even still feel this way, cause its definitely something difficult to endure.

As for the poem: It was very emotional; even though it was short it left an impression. It kinda made me think, like of all the things a person could write, something like this is going to be difficult to express well as well as in an "adult, put together" way. Believe me that is the hardest bit. The flow was amazingly smooth and easy to follow. The style was common and simple, but oh well it was still a great piece.

I'll stop rambling now. Sorry to take your time.

5/5

MRK