This is a really heartfelt and powerful poem. Its message is clear and the emotions are honest and pure. The speaker talking like that about his love effects the reader in mood and feeling aswell. I, for my part, got really cheerful as i read these kind words. Rhyme structure and flow couldn't be better in my opinion.

Holding you near, holding you tight
Kissing you soft as the day falls to night
Watching you sleep peacefully in bed
Remembering "I love you"
Was the last thing you said

^ I really like the imagery you set. The reader is able to imagine this very well, may it be because of your words or because he/she has been in the situation him-/herself. Your words describe the mood and feelings really well.

You were sent here by god to watch over me
You're a star in the sky as bright as can be
I know you're an angel don't try and deny
Every time you look at me
"I see heaven in your eyes"

^ I've changed no to know and angle to angel. It is absolutely brilliant that you kept the same topic in each stanza. In this stanza you only worked with words describing something godly or what the humans would connect with god for example heaven and angel.

She's so enchanting my life has just begun
Her lip as red as roses, hair shinning like the sun
With beauty so rare like a summer snow fall
She can make you smile
By saying nothing at all

^ You moved from god to nature, which is quite nice. The comparisons you use fit exactly to what you want to say. Changing the perspective helps this poem not to get boring and i like the message you stated.

She must have fallen from the stars above
Came down from heaven for me to love
She's my guardian angle she will light way
I hope I never lose her
"God please let her stay"

^ The last stanza is a good ending. It seems to summ up all the things that you mentioned before. All in all this is a really emotional poem that touched me. I enjoyed reading it and hope you will continue with this good work!

Grammar is MUCH better and the poem overall is cleaned up really well! This seems like a much more "mature" poem like we were talking about before! :)

A few things

"She's so enchanting my life has just begun"

I'd put a comma after enchanting. Also, second stanza, don't forget to capitalize God :)

I love the meaning behind this, as usual you have the emotion and great message definitely there, and now it's just cleaned up, so it's like a present with a pretty little bow :) Beautiful!

Simply beautilful! It made me smile with how darn sweet it is =)
It flows very well and I wouldn't change a thing about it 5/5

Wow tony i just love it she is so lucky to have some one to love her like this
you just know how to express your feelings so nice and the fllow of words is great bravo

Well done. I wouldn't say it's a 5 but it's close. Solid 4.
Also it's "shining" not shunning at the 3rd stanza

Wow I actually love this! Its soo sweet :) 5/5 defo!! xx

I must say I feel like less than an amateur, i see so many beautiful poems compared to mine and and hoping that one i can write like that. Keep the good job :)

Beautiful!

This is so beautiful, brought tears to my eyes:') 5/5 :'D <3

That was amazing! <3 :)))

Ok, im not going to write you a book i just want to say great job, i loved it. very meaningful.

Such an endearing write... full of that special love for someone. Well written & expressed. I loved reading this.. Well done!

LOOOOOOOOOOOOOOVVVVVVEEEEEEE!!!

:)

Adrianaxo

Wow, how to make a girl special<3

An enchanting poem. Wish everyone was that lucky. Keep her happy, treat her with love and respect and the angel will stay. Blessing for your love!

I wish i had someone to write about me like that. 5/5 my favorite part was Every time you look at me
"I see heaven in your eyes"
she's one lucky girl :)

Wow very touching i love this :)

I reali enjoyd readin dis poem.its feeld with intense emotion.gud write

I reali enjoyd readin dis poem.its feeld with intense emotion.gud write

That was so sweet!!! What a beautiful piece... I love it!!! God bless you!!!