Black Roses

"for I seek not,
the warmth of sunlight
nor the joy of sunflowers..

But,
the wounded truth
and the eerie darkness
that lays inside the most
virgin emotions in you.."

This entire poem was a masterpiece. but THIS right here, really touched a chord in me. Maybe it's because I'm having a little emotion thing myself right now. But those lines, I felt like they were written in my own heart, and you found a way to take those feelings, and make them something palpable. Amazing poem 5/5

WOW Yaki this was just amazing!!

for I seek not,
the warmth of sunlight
nor the joy of sunflowers..

But,
the wounded truth
and the eerie darkness
that lays inside the most
virgin emotions in you..

^^ My favorite part..totally opposite of what you think a person would want to receive.. Just loved these stanzas so much!!
I do not fancy
rainbows and butterflies
unless...
they are placed
in eyes of children.

^^ This was also amazing...I felt like it showed the person speaking was not totally heartless, that there was an ounce of positivity in this poem.

so bring to me,
your sickest regret.

^^ Awesome ending!! I hate dark poems, but I love your work, and I just loved this!!

This poem stunned me. It really carried a lot of feeling. I liked the poem from start to end and can find no falt what so ever.

really weldone

5/5

This is a wonderfully dark write. I especially like "the wounded truth." That's great metaphor..

I believe you could improve the flow by losing the commas and that the singular, "lays," should be plural... either "lies" or "lay."

I felt a rush of dark emotions when I read it...

The best thing was the TITLE :p .. I felt I was going to hear an Evanescence or Avril Lavigne song!

And it turned out to be a very strong poem.
Filled with incisive feelings and intensive thoughts.

GREAT