You slipped from our mountain
into some woebegone strife:
an endless trail, deafened
to the sweet tunes of life.
^^ I love this stanza.. so pure and spontaneous!

The flow was great and so was the images.
5/5

LArry this is just amazing, I took the same title just because the poem you wrote was very professional and amazingly flowing!
The meaning touched me, and the rhyme of God how you make me wnna write rhyming poems again.

this is just perfect, honest!
5/5

The reason I chose this piece out of your other one was because of the intense emotions that you gave everything for in your poem. The opening grabbed at my heart- to ponder back to that memory, perhaps you should have held on more? You introduce this background of song so beautifully and with a gentle flow-the ending sings of a misery made solo, and your ideas came across artistically and with great sadness.

Keep it up dear poet :)
MaryAnne