Judgement Day

I lovd the scene u creatd it is easy to imagine nd wel straight to the point.it was a great write whch held me to the last line.

I will simply start of with the title: I think that it an eye catcher and made me curious. I was wondering if what I expected and imagined simply reading the title would be fullfilled with your poem, which made me want to read it.

When the moonlight fades away and all the stars become unused
The sky will start becoming darker, people running round confused
"Is this just a short eclipse?� they'll cry, "the moon emits no light"?
Until they realise the Lord, our God, has come to show his might

^ You might want to remove this "�" with the double quotes you actually wanted to set and I think you wanted to place the questionmark within those double quotes.
Alright, I thought that the way you described the humans compared to God fit quite well because it shows the difference in their importance. While God is wise and allmighty the humans seem rather slow.
But I have to admit that I do not think that "cry" is the right word, it seems out of place.

"I created man", God will proclaim, "I gave you all your life
But all you've done with it is cause others pain, misery and strife
I have made it clear to all mankind that one day you will pay
And behold that time has come, today will be your Judgment Day"

^ I like your choice of words in this stanza, especially the way you started by saying that God is the one who created man, which underlines his importance and impact since humans would not be without him.
Maybe it's me but I think that the way you continued states the fact that God gave humans the free will, which makes them decide whether they'll act properly or not.
Yet everybody should keep in mind that God will end up judging ones action, which is his purpose for appreaing in this poem.

"So how then have you treated others, were you kind, gracious to all?
Because if this is not the case then this will be your last downfall
Did your servants cook you mighty feasts while you left them with gruel
I will humble all of those who were proud, arrogant and cruel"

^ This stanza shows an other side of God. The fact that he gives people the chance to explain themself rather than abadon them. He forgives mistakes but only if you actually regret what you did yet one should never take Gods mercy for granted as he is able to punish people.

"And your riches will not save you as you see your sins unfold
They'll be thrown out like the refuse: worthless silver, worthless gold
Even angels know to fear my wrath, in that they will agree
For those that sin are cast to Hell to live eternal misery"

^ I can not completly agree with the content in this stanza. Even if one sins God will not reject him right away. He is someone who offers second chances if worthy rather than give up on those who did not act properly right away. It seems somewhat like a threat though I do not think God would ever threaten someone.
Other than that I think that this stanza underlined Gods power really well.

"So know that Heaven is preserved by me in order to be felled
And it will fall down all around you 'less my laws are all upheld
But please do not be too disheartened for the good will all survive
Whereas the ones that turn from me, all of their souls I will deny"

^ I really like the conclusion: God has to be strict sometimes that's why he tells people what happens to them if they do not do what he thinks would be right but he'd never forget to reward those that are good hearted.
I have to admit that I would of liked to hear the judgement that those humans had to go through still but I guess you do not want to put yourself in the position of judging others even if it's just in a poem.

When I first saw this poem I thought that the lines might be too long but I was wrong, they were not too long. I also liked the flow and rhymes.

Your word choice was really nice because they seem to reflect God well since they were not usual and did not have a low level.

Overall this is a powerful poem that surprised me positively and had me captivated till the very end. Sorry for the wall of text. ;)