Comments : Old Souls

  • 8 years ago

    by nourayasmine

    That was passionate and soooo smooth, Sibby! I'm going to leave a super-long comment, later on ;) five

  • 8 years ago

    by Jordan

    "I feel like I've known you
    ever since I sprouted out of the garden,
    covered in dirt and laughing at butterflies. I feel like you
    are my oldest thing,"

    What a great way to kick this one off. Childhood - how obvious and yet I wouldn't ever have thought of it. That's a smart move. :)

    This is such a beautiful story. It really means a lot to me as a firm believer in love. The way that you play with the notion of destiny without making any mention of it destroys any chance of this being labeled cliche.

    "I remember our hands twining, our
    fingers pressing,
    our pulses thudding in time
    to the oldest possible rhythms."

    The break in the first and second line was nice and then look! You returned to the original structure in line 3. You're a brilliant lady.

  • 8 years ago

    by sibyllene

    This poem is so cheesy. I can't help it - I'm starting to think its impossible to write love poems when you're happy and sound.

  • 8 years ago

    by nourayasmine

    Sibbs, I love this but I am not really in the mood of commenting now, I want to leave a proper comment later on. ;)

  • 8 years ago

    by Yakari Gabriel

    I seriously wanna cry right now..
    I wrote such a long ass comment on why I loved this piece...
    and the computer just logged me out...

    I will be back...when i get over this,,
    Jeezus christ!... :@ :@ :@ :@ :@

  • 8 years ago

    by sibyllene

    Hahahaha! I'm sorry that happened - it sucks! This comment made me laugh out loud, though. I understand your anger.

  • 8 years ago

    by Yakari Gabriel

    ..

    SHUT UP,WOULD YOU JUST SHUT THE EFF UP...
    YOU CALL THIS POEM CHEESY ONE MORE TIME...
    I WILL FREAKING GO TO WHATEVER NARNIA OR PANDORA OR WHATEVER COUNTRY IT IS YOU LIVE IN..AND I WILL KICK YOUR BEHIND FOR DISRESPECTING THIS PIECE OF ART...

    YES,
    SO I READ THIS POEM LIKE 4/5/6 TIMES
    BECAUSE I DIDNT WANT TO COPY PASTE IT AND EXPLAIN WHY I LOVED EACH PIECE..
    I WANTED TO JUST UNDERSTAND IT SO GOOD,SO PERFECTLY...SOAK IT ALL IN..
    AND SPEAK ABOUT IT FREELY...

    *CALMS DOWN*

    OH WHAT THE HECK I AM NOT FREAKING CALMED DOWN.

    THIS..IS *BRITTISH ACCENT*
    BLOODY MAGNIFICENT.

    you described here,
    Childhood loving at its best...

    I almost felt as if I was watching Little rascals or some ef like that because a was like M babyQurl.. A recall damn mud between my toes when i was a little kid...

    Sybss,This piece is so beautiful...
    I feel like grabbing your shoulders and shaking it to make you understand how amazing i found this to be...

    the use of word...not to complex,yet not simple
    the thingy about looking over the shoulder.. first kisses...ahh *BURST INTO TEARS LIKE SPONGEBOB*....

    i am completely inlove with this piece I cant even...

    this is the kind of poem that makes you just wanna go on..

    truth be told i was sad when it ended...i was like 'i want more :('
    ....

    You held my interest from the title till the very last letter...

    and many may think i'm exxagerating...or uhm over doing it...or over praising this poem...

    *AMERICAN GHETTO ACCENT*

    evry body and they mama can think what they want about this comment...but M babyGurl..I just think this is fantastic...And Who ever doesnt like it..
    can sit they ass down and suck it up..

    Cause
    I is what I is...

    Mm.

  • 8 years ago

    by yogi73

    Good stuff

  • 8 years ago

    by silvershoes

    Oh Sibs, you really got me with this one... my eyes are watering. I sense this is for your lad, in which case you should show him :) It will make his heart melt!

  • 8 years ago

    by Sungrl And Mrs Whatsit

    WONDERFUL!!

  • 8 years ago

    by Yakari Gabriel

    Here for read #695983480248

    x0x0