That was passionate and soooo smooth, Sibby! I'm going to leave a super-long comment, later on ;) five

"I feel like I've known you
ever since I sprouted out of the garden,
covered in dirt and laughing at butterflies. I feel like you
are my oldest thing,"

What a great way to kick this one off. Childhood - how obvious and yet I wouldn't ever have thought of it. That's a smart move. :)

This is such a beautiful story. It really means a lot to me as a firm believer in love. The way that you play with the notion of destiny without making any mention of it destroys any chance of this being labeled cliche.

"I remember our hands twining, our
fingers pressing,
our pulses thudding in time
to the oldest possible rhythms."

The break in the first and second line was nice and then look! You returned to the original structure in line 3. You're a brilliant lady.

This poem is so cheesy. I can't help it - I'm starting to think its impossible to write love poems when you're happy and sound.

Sibbs, I love this but I am not really in the mood of commenting now, I want to leave a proper comment later on. ;)

I seriously wanna cry right now..
I wrote such a long ass comment on why I loved this piece...
and the computer just logged me out...

I will be back...when i get over this,,
Jeezus christ!... :@ :@ :@ :@ :@

Hahahaha! I'm sorry that happened - it sucks! This comment made me laugh out loud, though. I understand your anger.

..

SHUT UP,WOULD YOU JUST SHUT THE EFF UP...
YOU CALL THIS POEM CHEESY ONE MORE TIME...
I WILL FREAKING GO TO WHATEVER NARNIA OR PANDORA OR WHATEVER COUNTRY IT IS YOU LIVE IN..AND I WILL KICK YOUR BEHIND FOR DISRESPECTING THIS PIECE OF ART...

YES,
SO I READ THIS POEM LIKE 4/5/6 TIMES
BECAUSE I DIDNT WANT TO COPY PASTE IT AND EXPLAIN WHY I LOVED EACH PIECE..
I WANTED TO JUST UNDERSTAND IT SO GOOD,SO PERFECTLY...SOAK IT ALL IN..
AND SPEAK ABOUT IT FREELY...

*CALMS DOWN*

OH WHAT THE HECK I AM NOT FREAKING CALMED DOWN.

THIS..IS *BRITTISH ACCENT*
BLOODY MAGNIFICENT.

you described here,
Childhood loving at its best...

I almost felt as if I was watching Little rascals or some ef like that because a was like M babyQurl.. A recall damn mud between my toes when i was a little kid...

Sybss,This piece is so beautiful...
I feel like grabbing your shoulders and shaking it to make you understand how amazing i found this to be...

the use of word...not to complex,yet not simple
the thingy about looking over the shoulder.. first kisses...ahh *BURST INTO TEARS LIKE SPONGEBOB*....

i am completely inlove with this piece I cant even...

this is the kind of poem that makes you just wanna go on..

truth be told i was sad when it ended...i was like 'i want more :('
....

You held my interest from the title till the very last letter...

and many may think i'm exxagerating...or uhm over doing it...or over praising this poem...

*AMERICAN GHETTO ACCENT*

evry body and they mama can think what they want about this comment...but M babyGurl..I just think this is fantastic...And Who ever doesnt like it..
can sit they ass down and suck it up..

Cause
I is what I is...

Mm.

Good stuff

Oh Sibs, you really got me with this one... my eyes are watering. I sense this is for your lad, in which case you should show him :) It will make his heart melt!

WONDERFUL!!

Here for read #695983480248

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