Lift me up to the roof
so that crescent
may caress me
and cure my
broken wing

i loved this so well thought out ... my fav part is posted i really thought this was a stunning pieceim glad u posted:D

Your work inspires me to do better with each write. I added you to my favs so I can keep a close eye on you lol

I really enjoyed this one as it's like you read my mind, embarking on the life's journey. It's frightening and yet exciting at the same time.

Excellent
Connie

Jenni, I thought you penned this well. You're getting better with every write, I agree.
Loved this,
keep writing
love,
Tara

Jennniiiiiiii :)

Wow.. this is the most mature poem of yours I've ever read.. (well i havent checked all of your work .. but, i think :p)

It flowed so greatttttttttt!! and it's like a real scene viewed through your words :)
FIVE

WOW!! As usual this is marvelous! You have done a stunning job with the flow, imagery and choice of words! I am completely amazed, because this piece is so fabulous!

You knew I nominated this, didn't ya! xD

"It's getting time
for me to take
the next step,
and let go of
my home and
the past."

Beautiful flow and expressions....I love how honest you are in this piece, like letting go of who you thought you were and entering a world you want to join.

"One step forth,
I drop..
Will I alight
or crash?"

Few words that really spark this piece- I think we all have those growing questions.....some get deeper and longer, others still challenge our courage and character, but everything we learn will be valuable.

"(Does it matter
or will my
- bravery -
be enough honor?)"

This was some incredible lines.....you made me really think about the things I do I call "brave"...what will it look like to others? Thought-provoking and well constructed.

"Not occurring as planned,
something is crossing
my way, causing me
to crash.

Lift me up to the roof
so that crescent
may caress me
and cure my
broken wing."

I love that smooth mention of the moon, and being lifted up! Like every time we fall and our hopes crash, we can be mended!!!!! Beautifully expressed with soul. We do grow wings I believe spiritually......they can be healed :)

"The sky is my home
may I be able to fly
or not, I'll always
be created to
appreciate
freedom."

I found myself just giving such respect to you and these words that reminded me, whether I succeed in how I want to, the beauty of freedom will always shine. THank you for sharing that wisdom.

"So I vow to guard
my endless asylum
because..
it's getting time."

A deep ending that honestly inspires....it makes me more aware and yet it does raise those fears I sometimes hide.

Worth another read, please keep writing dear!

MaryAnne

Very good poem. The wording was good and so was the flow for the most part. The flow did seem to be a little off in the first stanza other then that it was fine. I enjoyed reading it.

5/5

Its just great! It deserves a 5/5.