The heart of a dreamer beats out of time
lives in a world of magical rhyme.
Open to hurt, confusion and pain
Yet moves forward with out restraint

^ With out should read without, I love the opening line and the rhymes of the first two.

Soaring with angels light as the air
moonbeams dance all around my hair.
His love is perfect or so I thought
all of the stories were actually bought.

^Serenity flows throughout this, love the imagery too Connie!!

Treading my pride I don't allow
relationship lost, I now disavow.
Brush off the shoulders, standing up tall
wipe the tears forgetting it all..

^Love the use of the title in this stanza and the last line too!!

What a wonderful piece Connie, I seriously mean that, this was beautiful.

You are amazing!

The flow was great, rhymes incorporated well, great structure and imagery and emotion too.
5/5

Love Tara-Kay

Broken and shattered , played like a game
for the moment all men are the same.
Try as you may you can't get me back
truth is something you seriously lack.

this is my favorite one, brutal and full of emotions great job :)

Connnniieeee :D

I hope you winnn!!! GOOD LUCK with this brilliant piece of yours :)

:D sorry for being late, as i promised here i am ...
well I love your title, and a contest so am not sure what kind of contests but this got to be a winner. ;)

Open to hurt, confusion and pain
Yet moves forward with out restraint

^
if you want to use yet, I think it will make more sense if you said it this way..like use "but" and btw with out is one word should be" without ".

Hence:

Though open to hurt, confusion and pain
but moves forward without restraint.

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Soaring with angels light as the air
moonbeams dance all around my hair.
^
you rock, this is amazing, just a magical view! like your talent :)

for the moment all men are the same
^
this does not sound right hun, really!

for the moment when all men are the same perhaps ?
check it..

other than these, i do love your poem a lot, and it i think you have a special touch, like a cinnamon haha :)

5/5
and good luck

Treading my pride I don't allow
relationship lost, I now disavow.
Brush off the shoulders, standing up tall
wipe the tears forgetting it all..

I just liked the whole poem ,but loved this one for such a strong end..great write connie..

I love your words i dont think ive read a poem i dont like love it connie x

The first thing that strike me was the flow. It's smooth and rhymes unforced.
//Brush off the shoulders, standing up tall
wipe the tears forgetting it all..
// loved these lines... that's the way to live life :D
lovely write up

Soaring with angels light as the air
moonbeams dance all around my hair.
His love is perfect or so I thought
all of the stories were actually bought.

I love this part! Perfectly written and makes the reading really feel what you are trying to say here!

Broken and shattered , played like a game
for the moment all men are the same.
Try as you may you can't get me back
truth is something you seriously lack.

Wow, again, nice work! :) I loved it!

Connie: A sad story penned with lessons ..... very nice flow, choice of words and near perfect rhyming. I am certainly impressed.

I wonder if you rearrange the first 2 stanza's to match the thoughts in each, so they convey the same emotion, would it change the story in it?
So here is a slight re-arrangement of your words...tell me what you think:

Soaring with angels light as the air
moonbeams dance all around my hair.
The heart of a dreamer beats out time
lives in( ?within) a world of magical rhyme.

His love is (? was) perfect or so I thought
(but) all of (?his) stories were actually bought.
Open to hurt, confusion and pain
Yet moves forward with out restraint (?refrain - rhymes better with pain)

(I am not sure if it is the same thoughts being conveyed here ...so my apologies for interjecting my thoughts in your poem.
As always, love your work. 5/5

I think i agree with eveyone...i loved the poem it was nicely done :) 5/5