Comments : Your composition

  • 8 years ago

    by CoLliN

    This
    wow
    this poem.... *hugs*
    lets be friends.. sigh
    *hugs*i'm such a big freakin teddy bear

  • 8 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Jen, I liked this one, really nicely written with lots of emotion.
    Farely simple to understand but words were great to the imagery.
    a real nice write
    love
    Tara
    x x

  • 8 years ago

    by CoLliN

    Siiiiigh
    *hugs*

  • 8 years ago

    by Liliana

    Now I have to accompany
    myself on the piano,
    playing your composition.
    I surrender as the melody
    fills with spirit, you were
    my white hope.

    *my favorite*

    Jen I really love this one, especially the imagery used on the poem 5/5

  • 8 years ago

    by Cinnamonspice

    Your work is magic, like a slow moving river it flows smooth with out flaws. Your wording is always intense no matter what you write about. Excellent

    Connie

  • 8 years ago

    by XblackrainbowsX

    Wow im speachless that was amazing

  • 8 years ago

    by The Poet Behind The Poems

    That was awesome jen i love the last stranza really well written amazing 5/5

  • 8 years ago

    by nourayasmine

    Something I can relate to, does this poem speak of bidding farewell and break-ups? if so, then I got it. There are some touchy lines and original expressions.
    I loved the flow, your new style is getting much better, sweetheart. Keep writing like this :)

    Though, I found some cliches, especially in the first and forth stanzas, perhaps, you can manage to replace them with your original thoughts. Nevertheless, I can't say anything about the flow, for it was soft and it didn't break, at all, in no place, actually. And the emotions as well were something praiseworthy. :)

    "Now I have to accompany
    myself on the piano,
    playing your composition."

    -This is what I found much enjoyable in this write, I think this is really full of feelings. I felt someone 'denying' a farewell, as if it's not going to happen, and it just was beautifully sad.
    The ending was emotional as well, and the word choice was somehow clever and it all worked together. Good write, hope to read from you more soon. :)

  • 8 years ago

    by Decayed

    Jenni. Jenni. Dear Jenni..

    YOUR COMPOSITION is composed flawlessly.
    I can't find words to comment.
    I hope this could win!!! :)
    You really moved me with this sad write..

    HIGH FIVE ;)

  • 8 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Your writing is so eloquent and it genuinely moves me...this delicate character who is remembering her love, it was breathtaking when you described how she doesn't sing, because his composition is the only thing glorious enough. The emotion is so honest- I can feel the sorrow and the spirit of him that is living through this strong woman....there are no lies in this piece- because you devote yourself to your words and offer them as only a walk with the truth that this character is feeling in their heart....

    What a story- absolutely passionate dear.

    God bless- take care please!
    MaryAnne

  • Beautifully penned by an amazing poetess, Jenni.

    Your work always leaves me wanting more and some everlasting impressions with the emotion you fill every stanza with.

    5/5

    -Heather