Ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
MYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY
GOSHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH
ohhhhhhhh myyyyyyyy goodddddddddddd!!!!
JESUSSSS CHRISTTTTTT
Ya elehi!!!!
soliyotna!!!
HOLY COW
I want to wow in all languages!!

Melpomene I LOVED this!
what should I say?
sometimes I find it really hard to leave a comment on a piece of yours because you won't read but nonsense because I become in awe and words leave me and this is just embarrassing!
I read lots of love poems, but this one.....I don't know what to say...you should feature this! I'm gonna nominate the next week for I used all of my votes!! :(
and it better wins because what I have read is a miracle!

Too many times
I brushed springs
foliage from my skin.
^^^^
I reaaaallllllyyy feell inspired
I reaallly feel like taking my pen and
write!
this opening drew me in, right away
I don't know ...I'm not sure
but "off my skin" would work better, right?
I really am unsure, just wanted to point something out, haha.

It's presence breathed that
of unnurtured bulbs,
waterlogged like
lilies and
sunken by a coke can
once home to snails of a
backyard pond.
^^^
I have never EVER found someone who can use words in a more perfect way than you do!
a coke can, ha?
I want to nominate thisssss

It was only when
the leaves curved with
my curves that I
would find comfort
in my silence,
^^^^
OMGGGGG
OMGGGGG
OMGGGG
I can't stop omging!
I cannot help it!
the first two lines just about gave me chills!
you pressed the wrong button with this, Mel!

they'd perch 'pon
hips, nestle
behind my ears and
sprout colours of
a paint palette.
^^^
SOOOOOOO passionate
soooo romantic
and full of emotions, you are to my favorites right away!!

I'd often ponder why
you'd carve yourself
within their stems.
^^^
I'll leave this without ANY comment so that you can KNOW that I was speechless.

The words,
small-scripted in Greek,
those of vulnerable
sentiments

written or unwritten
in a way I'd never known.
^^^
I hate to repeat myself
and tell you this is amazing
and wonderful and breathtaking
but Mel they really were
and I cannot find any other word
in English to describe them!
maybe perfect????

nooo I've used that too. :P

--

You'd spend countless hours
teaching me the words of
your language,
^^^
I don't know why you seperated between this and the above....my suggestions would be to remove it or pm me telling me why :P
well, back to the poem, this stanza felt a bit ..old I mean I've read that many times before and I guess you are so original and your words are original too...but this expression wasn't that new to me. :)

an hourglass
tipped 'pon its side
covered in vine.
^^^
I like it when you say 'pon instead of upon haha
I don't know why I just like it...:P
I LOVE it when poets use vine or such in their poems, vine covering an hourglass, something I've never read before in a poem!
O.R.I.G.I.N.A.L

--

You'd often find me,
garden with a book
^^^
do you know that I didn't know that 'garden' can be a verb???

monitoring time
with sticks from an
old oak, a sundial
marked with pebbles
^^^
monitoring time is really original and well-placed..and I like the imagery here, so much..

for you had buried
my pocket watch
within sand -
knowing time as the
number of breaths we
would take
^^^
my favorite!!!!!!!
MY FAVORITEEEE
if this is nominated and doesnt win I'm gonna GRRRRRRR!!!!! kill my self :P

and yet

I still scribble
roman numerals on your page
to find you have
erased them -

replacing my fears
with a hand written
"aioniotiita."

^^^^
loved the usage of this!!!!
this poem is all about forgetting time, am I right? like he made you forget time! ohhh wow..

for sure five out of five
and yeah write with me XD
great job!

Ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
MYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY
GOSHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH
ohhhhhhhh myyyyyyyy goodddddddddddd!!!!
JESUSSSS CHRISTTTTTT
Ya elehi!!!!
soliyotna!!!
HOLY COW
I want to wow in all languages!!

Melpomene I LOVED this!
what should I say?
sometimes I find it really hard to leave a comment on a piece of yours because you won't read but nonsense because I become in awe and words leave me and this is just embarrassing!
I read lots of love poems, but this one.....I don't know what to say...you should feature this! I'm gonna nominate the next week for I used all of my votes!! :(
and it better wins because what I have read is a miracle!

Too many times
I brushed springs
foliage from my skin.
^^^^
I reaaaallllllyyy feell inspired
I reaallly feel like taking my pen and
write!
this opening drew me in, right away
I don't know ...I'm not sure
but "off my skin" would work better, right?
I really am unsure, just wanted to point something out, haha.

It's presence breathed that
of unnurtured bulbs,
waterlogged like
lilies and
sunken by a coke can
once home to snails of a
backyard pond.
^^^
I have never EVER found someone who can use words in a more perfect way than you do!
a coke can, ha?
I want to nominate thisssss

It was only when
the leaves curved with
my curves that I
would find comfort
in my silence,
^^^^
OMGGGGG
OMGGGGG
OMGGGG
I can't stop omging!
I cannot help it!
the first two lines just about gave me chills!
you pressed the wrong button with this, Mel!

they'd perch 'pon
hips, nestle
behind my ears and
sprout colours of
a paint palette.
^^^
SOOOOOOO passionate
soooo romantic
and full of emotions, you are to my favorites right away!!

I'd often ponder why
you'd carve yourself
within their stems.
^^^
I'll leave this without ANY comment so that you can KNOW that I was speechless.

The words,
small-scripted in Greek,
those of vulnerable
sentiments

written or unwritten
in a way I'd never known.
^^^
I hate to repeat myself
and tell you this is amazing
and wonderful and breathtaking
but Mel they really were
and I cannot find any other word
in English to describe them!
maybe perfect????

nooo I've used that too. :P

--

You'd spend countless hours
teaching me the words of
your language,
^^^
I don't know why you seperated between this and the above....my suggestions would be to remove it or pm me telling me why :P
well, back to the poem, this stanza felt a bit ..old I mean I've read that many times before and I guess you are so original and your words are original too...but this expression wasn't that new to me. :)

an hourglass
tipped 'pon its side
covered in vine.
^^^
I like it when you say 'pon instead of upon haha
I don't know why I just like it...:P
I LOVE it when poets use vine or such in their poems, vine covering an hourglass, something I've never read before in a poem!
O.R.I.G.I.N.A.L

--

You'd often find me,
garden with a book
^^^
do you know that I didn't know that 'garden' can be a verb???

monitoring time
with sticks from an
old oak, a sundial
marked with pebbles
^^^
monitoring time is really original and well-placed..and I like the imagery here, so much..

for you had buried
my pocket watch
within sand -
knowing time as the
number of breaths we
would take
^^^
my favorite!!!!!!!
MY FAVORITEEEE
if this is nominated and doesnt win I'm gonna GRRRRRRR!!!!! kill my self :P

and yet

I still scribble
roman numerals on your page
to find you have
erased them -

replacing my fears
with a hand written
"aioniotiita."

^^^^
loved the usage of this!!!!
this poem is all about forgetting time, am I right? like he made you forget time! ohhh wow..

for sure five out of five
and yeah write with me XD
great job!

DON'T WORRY NANO I GOT THIS UNDER CONTROL...I NOMINATED IT ALREADY...
OKAY... I WAS THE FIRST ONE TO SEE THIS SO I AM TAKING ALL THE CREDITS THIS RECIEVES OKAY...:D :D

WHERE SHOULD I START?OR HOW...
I CAN'T COPY PASTEEE AND EXPLAIN WHY I LOVED THE WHOLE PIECE BECAUSE IT MIGHT TAKE FOREVER...SO I TOOK OUT MY TOP TOP TOP TOP TO LE TOPS OF BEST...TO STARTTT THIS...

*DRUMROLL*
-Calms down-

all of it was amazing...but i particularly found emotional fondness to these little stanza's...

It was only when
the leaves curved with
my curves that I
would find comfort
in my silence,
^
yes! when I think of a curved leave...I think of a dry one...which means fall right? you know cause in fall all the leaves fall down...and are crooked and curved..so here I pondered whether you were speaking of how you find yourself mesmerized by fall..Or whether you are speaking of a certain time that makes you silent..
Either ways,this was so soft and elegant... like you.

The words,
small-scripted in Greek,
those of vulnerable
sentiments

written or unwritten
in a way I'd never known
^
here I believe you are speaking about your hades :p....
I love how you use 'small-scripted' here...
it illustrates how difficult it must have been to understand...the word choice here is quite tastefull specially how you used sentiments..instead of feelings..or emotions..it made it all so much more romantic...

for you had buried
my pocket watch
within sand -
knowing time as the
number of breaths we
would take and yet

I still scribble
roman numerals on your page
to find you have
erased them -

* This is most certainly My favorite part..
So bittersweet.. God.
I really did not know what to feel here..whether it was heartbreaking,or in fact just the opposite...

From What I understood I can tell this is about two lovers...and one constantly worries about time and the other one wants to erase it and make the moment last forever...

I have nothing else to say except that you leave me speechless everytime..

The more I grow,the more I comprehend your pieces..the more I like them..

This had such depth,such feeling...

People will probably talk about how I always nominate your pieces...

But god,
they are always..worthy of nominations...

Love you!;)

Wow this is really beautiful..written in beautiful and subtle way. The pulchritude of the imagery drift my mind to read it again and again. Very brilliant penned:))
~C

I can genuinely say this is one of the finest examples of poetry I have read on this site.
Brilliant.