I wish you were here with me
nearby the window watching
homeless offyellow clouds cracking
with this orange sunset, for a better
image to faint with, while I eating
my spring green apple

^
YEESSSS!!! WHAT A THOUGHTFUL INTRO..
COULDN'T HELP BUT REALLY PICTURE IT IN MY MIND...A GIRL BY HER WINDOW..WATCHING A SUNSET..(WHAT A GORGEOUS PICTURE)
I ADORE HOW INSTEAD OF PLAIN GREEN APPLE...YOU WENT FOR 'SPRING'...AND HOW I THE APPLE IS GREEN..I DON'T KNOW IF YOU KNOW THIS BUT GREEN I THE COLOR OF HOPE..OR SO I HAVE BEEN TAUGHT..SO IT FITS PERFECTLY WITH THE ATMOSPHERE YOU HAVE CREATED HERE...

Wish you were here next to me
being teased for a bite you crave
perhaps from my sweet cheeks
perhaps from my spring green apple,
as I finish eating it.
^
AAWW...HER EI PICTURED TWO LOVERS GIGGLING LIKE KIDS..ONE TEASING THE OTHER WITH THE APPLE...I EVEN IMAGINED YOU KNOW WHEN YOU MAKE SOMEONE BELIEVE THEY ARE GOING TO GET A BITE AND THEN YOU TAKE IT YOURSELFF....LOVELY<3<3
AND WHAT A TENDER USE OF WORDS...
'CHEEKS'..'TEASED' ALL OF THIS GIVE SUCH A INNOCENT TONE TO THE POEM...AS IF IT WAS SOMEONE WHO YOU KNOW WILL DO NO HARM...

Or staring at me, smiling at the way
I chew then lick my shy lips right before
I smile back because I know you smile
from your heart, when it's me.
So I giggle to break the intimate silence.

^
JEEEZ...THIS MUST BE MY FAVORITE STANZA,,
YOU PAINT SUCH CLEAR IMAGES OF THE SITUATION IN MY MIND I KINDA FEEL LIKE ADELE..WHEN SHE IS SINGING 'FINALLY I COULD SEE YOU CRYSTAL CLEAR'' <3

Why not be here next to me like
an orange sunset outside my window
a shy smile on my face
a sweet bite between my lips
or an apple in my hands,
for I can't believe that I have to think
of you even when I am only eating
a spring green apple,
^
JEEZ RANIA ONLY YOU CAN TURN A GREEN APPLE INTO SUCH A MAGICAL AND POWERFUL POEM..I AM INLOVE..AND I CAN MOST CERTAINLY SEE WHY YOU LOVE THIS PIECE...
I NEED TO KNOW WHERE ALL THIS GREATNESS COMES FROM....

well hope you know that I still have
a basket full of that, there in my tiny kitchen.
^
THIS IS SO CUTE...HOW YOU STILL HOPE THAT PERSON WILL COME AND YOU WILL BE ABLE TO GIVE THEM AN APPLE...'TINY KITCHEN'...THAT ADDED TO THE HUMBLE TONE THIS POEM..HAS.... OH MY..

I think I have all night, anyway...

^
HEARTBREAKING AND BEAUTIFUL...

WOW,RANIA...I DON'T KNOW WHAT TO SAY...I MEAN WHEN YOU TELL ME YOU HAVE WRITTEN SOMETHING NEW I FEEL LIKE A KID THAT IS GOING TO DISNEY LAND...

YOU ARE SO AMAZINGLY BRILLIANT...

I WILL MOST CERTAINLY COME BACK TO READ THIS!!!! IT IS A MUST...

mwaaaaa...

OMGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGG

Why not be here next to me like
an orange sunset outside my window
a shy smile on my face
a sweet bite between my lips
or an apple in my hands,

^^^
are you serious??

Of course you're not!

this was a masterpiece nana..omg if everytime you take an apple you write such a piece then this is a problem walla am not obliged to have a heartattack everytime you crave an apple hon....

nana you are an example and i always follow youu..u are my big sister who teaches me everything you are a light amidst my darkness believe it or not i love you like hell!!!! and i love your poems as well
i never get inspiredddd as i do while reading one of ur pieces!

Liked the imagination...:)
though i feel i'm too small to judge you....
but if my opinion counts, i loved it :)

I have to say this was the most inspirational first stanza I've seen in a long time. All the colors, images, feelings portrayed here really make me feel like I'm doing this myself, I'm the poem, eating this apple.

I love the third stanza the most, the innocent charm ties right along with the innocence from the apple. Love, love. "So I giggle to break the intimate silence." This part made me get an idea for my own poem, wahoo!

Very descriptive work here, Nana. I feel like Melpomene should be painting this lol

Not that i know who is this dedicated too,
but this was oozing with inspiration
what a remarkable imagination,
the homeless clouds, and the orange sunset really did put the picture in a lavish frame for me.

although i might think that this person wants a bite off of your cheeks, the spring green apple doesn't as good and fresh as it can get sound as appealing,
and the fact that you've mentioned how you think of that person while eating. cleaver

i <3 the tone throughout the whole thing, you've made a poem out of an apple, and the idea of remembering a single person, and if that tells me something, it tells me that you've unleashed a ton of inspiration to do so, because i sure as hell need more ideas to be able to write a sentence, yet with you it was a poem, and boy it was one hell of a write.
5/5, and i'd nominate if i had any votes left.
remarkable dear.

The spring green apple as fresh and as good as it could be doesn't sound as appealing as your cheeks*

Masterpiece!
The quiet pleasure of appreciating someone you know cares and misses you. The reverie in missing him, yet the comfort in knowing that distance is immaterial to the emotional range of someone whose cheeks are as shining luciously as a green spring apple. This must win!

I smile back, because I know you smile
from your heart when it's me. --this is very thoughful line.

you really set a great scene with this poem. I feel very connected to it. and you tell a touching story ta boot!

Awww I love this poem! I love the unusual title, and the story you've told in it.. It was so sweet and cute to read.. and relatable too!

"Wish you were here next to me
being teased for a bite you crave
perhaps from my sweet cheeks
perhaps from my spring green apple,
as I finish eating it."

Loved it... I'm actually craving an apple right now! I love green apples :) Great job my friend!

I loved how you have revolved the whole scene around a green apple... different imagery weaved so beautifully ...
could imagine the playfulness, the longing and love ...
beautifully crafted and icing is the ending

//well hope you know that I still have
a full basket, there in my tiny kitchen.

And I think I have all night, anyway...
// just loved it.

Nice carry on