The flow is great and the description is amazing, good job :) 5/5

The flow is great and the description is amazing, good job :) 5/5

The flow is great and the description is amazing, good job :) 5/5

Love this(:

You portray to the world a happy soul
But deep down,l see you not whole
Am with you,when you all alone
-my favorite part.
emotions pour out of this showing you know the person.
great job(:
5/5

Nice. This one is written very good, simple poem yet the words arent boring and keeps the reader interested in what the whole poem is all about. Nice one.

'I see a ship with wrecked sail'
'I see the pretence beneath the shame'
I could quote the whole poem to show you that it's
truly an amazing write.
This is just but beautiful.
5/5

Wow, each and every line is jus perfect..5/5..

Good choice of words :)

I love this!!

Very good, nice twist at the end turning it around to self realization!! 5/5

Wow I LoOOVE this poem soooo much it's fantastic and amazing just outright good :) :) perfect everything I really enjoyed reading it and absolutely looooved it :) :) 10/10 20 stars

Nice flow but a typo? broken wink...? or wing?
Last line though didnt work for me, that one was definately forced.

Mirror on the wall thats we

Its like you are seeing yourself through..and nobody else knows about you well other then yourself..just like the mirror reveals. A very good write!

Aww... wow I loved this poem. As I read it, I felt like you were talking to me. I really liked the imagery you created.

I loved the beginning until close to the end the most:

"Hide yourself where ever you please
Underground or under seas
I can still hear the quiver in your words
Flying with a broken wing just like a hurt bird
Underneath that veil
I see a ship with wrecked sail
I see the pretence beneath the shame
And your eyes flooding with intense rain
Am with you when your soul is sold
Replemishing your lantern with fuel in fold
You portray to the world a happy soul
But deep down,l see you not whole"

Very deep words and so lovely to read. Well done

This is soo good :)

Honstly supriced!
Wow.. This relates so much!
5/5

Brilliant..u r good with words..this is another great piece.

Nice imagery and great rhymes.
Keep writing!
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