Comments : On My Own

  • 12 years ago

    by Jenni

    First of all I like the title though it is a bit simple, but it does not tell too much and may make readers curious.
    I have to admit that I do not think that the first stanza fits to the rest of it as it seems to be really positive compared to what follows. I'd recommend you to rearrange it because then it would make the pieces fit better. I like the structure and that you decided to place a question between each situation you describe because that encourages the reader to think and they eventually hope to find an answer.
    Oh and I think you should work on the punctuation a bit because the way it is right now it's a bit tough to read, but overall I like the emotions in this poem and I think with a few changes it'll flow even better than it already does.

  • 12 years ago

    by Paul Gondwe

    So much has already been said by jenni..none theless i enjoyed reading this poem..

  • 12 years ago

    by ReBecca

    I perceived a feeling of sad melancholy in this. I enjoyed it. Yes a bit disjointed in places but heart felt.

  • 12 years ago

    by ana

    I like this poem.. it seems kinda like it has a dark background to it though. but like i said. I'm right by your side so don;t think you are ever alone

  • 12 years ago

    by Ali Khan

    I have been through this similar situation and while i was in it i wrote something like that but tht something didnt convey my message fully , now after reading it once, i read again and realized how awesome u have written it! the things which were missing in my write is completed by urs!! good job :) 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by xx stacy xx

    Nice

  • 12 years ago

    by Dr sarat sonowal

    Liked it from first to last excellent write

  • 12 years ago

    by BlueJay

    This is stunningly amazing. Excellent job.

  • 12 years ago

    by Jenna Bella Oldridge

    This poem made me go awww it also made me debate what is better - being alone or being around other people. An excellent poem that gets the reader thinking

    5/5