What the hell, are you just good at EVERYTHING you write? lol

This was the cutest poem Ive read in a long time. It made me chuckle since I'm really close to Britt I could picture this whole thing and I know the story behind it well. I loveedddd this poem and how you compared him meeting her to a hunter looking for a deer. In a way it sounds silly, but in this situation its was actually pretty beautiful to me :) I loved this Mel I bet Brittney does too! Very nice dedication!

This is beautifully written! I especially loved these lines:

the moment he wished
to tangle the milky way
within your hair.

and

showering your heart with
the feelings of a kaleidoscope
and printing X's and O's
'pon the flower petals
of your skin.

Just spectacular!!!

Oh Mel. You have just tickled my soul (whoa perverted sounding, but you know).

Whats REALLY funny, is Jason said the first thing that caught his eye about me was my hair. It was healthy and full and shiny, and he really loved it. He said it was the caveman in him, men look for women with strong hair to drag back to their cave.. so this part:

"pin-pointing
the moment he wished
to tangle the milky way
within your hair."

CRACKED me up! It was so spot on, did I tell you that story before? I didn't think I did.

You put a hunter in a beautiful situation, and it's funny, because it's both literal and metaphorical, which makes it doubly great. This whole piece just brought tears to my eyes and it meant so much to me. You really pick up on a lot of our relationship details (probably because of my freakin' constant venting). I can't nominate this til Monday, but I'm totally biased and gonna. lol.

You hit my emotions better than I could've. I'm still printing this out and having it by the guest book at the wedding. ;) I love you Mel!!

Agreed with all the above comments. This is an alluring composition. The last two stanzas really narrow it down to a home run. Each word, each line precisely penned. A mystical piece composed with a wave of magic wands. Very creative.

Mel! write about me and Anas. : D

^Kidding! : P

I like Britt, yet we're not that close, we talked but I don't know the whole story! still I guess that was a good description of love, a hunter looking for his deer, somehow I could imagine it, though your poems usually are too beautiful to be imagined, this write seemed so simple yet held such images that made me just picture the scene. Well, I think the last part where you used one of Britt's titles X's and O's and the petal of her skin, made me know how tender she is, and mostly sensible.

'tangle the milky way
within your hair'

Britt, what shampoo do you use? lol
What I could grasp from this line is that Britt has black hair? because it refers to space or sky or something... well wait, maybe you meant to say that Britt is beautiful in a simple way? Who knows! ;)

'showering your heart with
the feelings of a kaleidoscope'
^

I LOVE it when somebody uses 'shower' in a poem, it seriously brings the poem to life.

What's wrong here?
shower....hair...shampoo o.O
well, I suffer from dandruff! : P

Very wonderfully writenn, Melpo! Loved the write, Britt obviously did too. ; D

^Kidding! : P

I like Britt, yet we're not that close, we talked but I don't know the whole story! still I guess that was a good description of love, a hunter looking for his deer, somehow I could imagine it, though your poems usually are too beautiful to be imagined, this write seemed so simple yet held such images that made me just picture the scene. Well, I think the last part where you used one of Britt's titles X's and O's and the petal of her skin, made me know how tender she is, and mostly sensible.

'tangle the milky way
within your hair'

Britt, what shampoo do you use? lol
What I could grasp from this line is that Britt has black hair? because it refers to space or sky or something... well wait, maybe you meant to say that Britt is beautiful in a simple way? Who knows! ;)

'showering your heart with
the feelings of a kaleidoscope'
^

I LOVE it when somebody uses 'shower' in a poem, it seriously brings the poem to life.

What's wrong here?
shower....hair...shampoo o.O
well, I suffer from dandruff! : P

Very wonderfully writenn, Melpo! Loved the write, Britt obviously did too. ; D

This poem has an opulence in its composition. A unique, unparalleled and thoughtful write.