Comments : The Mind Begs For Mercy

  • 12 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Jenna!!!!
    Where did this come from?
    I loved every single part of this,
    I loved the descriptions, simple yet so effective,
    the sadness and the hoplelessness really affected me, and I felt tears in my eyes,
    this was effortlessly penned from the heart no doubt
    and I loved it!!!
    Yes
    Yes
    Yes

    I loved it.

    Love
    Tara
    xxxx

  • 12 years ago

    by Liliana

    Tara said it all indeed a powerfull poem you deserve a 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Lioness

    Hey Bella,

    What I loved about this poem was that as I was reading the words, I could feel everything. It was like it was written for me. I suffer from OCD so all these thoughts are in my mind that I can't control and I cannot stop thinking, my mind keeps going

    LOVED the poem

    Well written

    x

  • 12 years ago

    by nouriguess

    You are my bella girl, lol!

    I liked the play on words, so much, the wording was unique. I felt you were hopeless within these words, trying to describe the way you were feeling yet unable to portray them, and I was like.....oh I can feel this! every part made sense more than the one before it. In brief, this was an epic write.

    Five, and a nomination the next week.

  • 12 years ago

    by The Queen

    Wow, that's one hectic mind you've penned there, lol. Good job on the repetition, it enhances the atmosphere of this piece along with its precise use of words. Good job!

  • 12 years ago

    by Exostosis

    Must say, the structure is alluring. Each sentence progressively deepens the affect this composition has upon readers. The flow is lucid. Speaks alot about the organized mess that is, the author. The word play is certainly amusing yet it does not distract the reader from the poem continuity. Splendid job.

  • 12 years ago

    by Jess

    This Is Amazing!
    I Love The Way You Write Its So Inspiring!
    The Words You Use Are Perfect!
    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Chelsey

    Ohhhhhhhh I loved this! It reminded me of a poem Id write! I like the examples, and the lists, it makes me read it fast and understand it a little bit, then i read it again and understand it more. I really liked this. Your second stanza was awesome :)