I'm really impressed by this poem. It's beautiful even if it is on a sad topic.

"It's depressing, I know
but who am I to deny myself
these feelings? This pain,
these tears, they let me know
I'm still breathing... that I still
have a voice."

I really like the above stanza as I feel you are being very honest. People always expect others to cope and be strong. The whole world seems to have a "pull yourself together" attitude. They act like it's not ok to be the weak one once in a while but the above stanza shows that it's ok to cry, that its ok to feel pain and accept it instead of denying it.

I know this poem is a sad one but it carrys a very positive message because we all need to feel alive even if it's only pain that reminds us we are still breathingand that's the message your poem put across

5/5

I find this an emotional write filled with honesty and not laced with fancy words..very
touching..take care.

Simple and clear. I enjoyed the read

Connie0

Must agree with everyone, this is an emotional piece, filled with honesty. A bit sad, yes but true.

Quiet. But I know she
hears me. I hope she's
keeping my thoughts
safe, for I can not hold
on to them anymore.

Clearly indicates, the author has thoughts just wobbling all over, but channeling/venting them is hard. Totally shows the pain festering.

Layered...
with guilt and remembrance,
they force me to admit
what I've been hiding for
too long. Empty. I am
empty. I use to have so much
love for the world...but now
I just wish it would all wither
away with me.

Empty. I am empty-So simple yet so commendable. The rest of the stanza is as clear as water.

It's depressing, I know
but who am I to deny myself
these feelings? This pain,
these tears, they let me know
I'm still breathing... that I still
have a voice.

It speaks of how the pain is too much to take, but makes you feel alive within these fabricated walls of torment.

The flow of the poem is flawless and the composition itself if so awesome. Splendid job hun.

"but now
I just wish it would all wither
away with me."

^ I really love this line.

Your poems are so well written, and all unique. You express things in a way I never thought possible. 5/5

mandy :)

Good :) just plain good as always 5/5

Fave! Wonderful work.

You're so talented.

5/5!